Approved Character Inoue Kiko

[Ben]

Hello! New player means new character, I'm sure you all know what to do. https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... inoue_kiko

 

[Jimmy]

Not perfect, but a good attempt from a beginner. The SARP is strong in this one.

 

[Nashoba]

Hello Ben,

Welcome to SARP. A very good first character try.

Here are few items that need addressing.

Something is missing from this "and smooth common to her "

I'm given to understand that she's rather more tomboyish than most Nekos.

This is not a distinguishing feature, its a facet of her personality. For most Nekos its usually their tattoo, however since Kiko was not manufactured so she would not have one. So that could be her distinguishing feature.


This was under Communications " When she lets herself have fun, she has a good sense of humor. Otherwise, she is very good at being inoffensive. "

 

[Wes]

This is an example of a great bio. When it's approved, I want to make a copy of it to use as an example in the character creation guide.

You can really tell that Ben made a real effort to make a character that fits well in the SARP setting and I appreciate that.

 

[Doshii Jun]

Definitely a solid entry for a first-timer. Be proud, Ben; you did well.

 

[Ben]

Hello Ben,

Welcome to SARP. A very good first character try.

Here are few items that need addressing.

Something is missing from this "and smooth common to her "

I could have sworn I put "skin" in the appropriate place the first time. It's fixed now. Thank you.

I'm given to understand that she's rather more tomboyish than most Nekos.

This is not a distinguishing feature, its a facet of her personality. For most Nekos its usually their tattoo, however since Kiko was not manufactured so she would not have one. So that could be her distinguishing feature.

Fixed, thank you.

This was under Communications " When she lets herself have fun, she has a good sense of humor. Otherwise, she is very good at being inoffensive. "

I was under the impression that Communications covers social skills. I'll move it to personality. Again, thanks.

Not perfect, but a good attempt from a beginner. The SARP is strong in this one.

Thank you.

This is an example of a great bio. When it's approved, I want to make a copy of it to use as an example in the character creation guide.

You can really tell that Ben made a real effort to make a character that fits well in the SARP setting and I appreciate that.

I'm honored. If you need my permission for that, you have it.

Definitely a solid entry for a first-timer. Be proud, Ben; you did well.

Yes, sir.

 

[Nashoba]

Good Job Ben,
I added the YE 32 Standard Issue to the page for you.

Approved

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