Approved Character [ISS Dig-It] Neyla Realgar

[Pancakei]

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:neyla_realgar

@Legix @raz

In hindsight I can only see the future shenanigans that may come from the similarities between Neha and Neyla.

 

[Wes]

An interesting character and already illustrated!

 

[Legix]

Many moons came to pass, for the formation of this Kud assistant.

Butt approved.

 

[Legix]

After speaking with the FM/Creator of the Kudhacari, @raz, I'd like this to be briefly unapproved.

As the Kudhacari still have yet to achieve a sector-wide influence/the ability to traverse or communicate with the other factions as a whole, it feels (personally) that this would be treading on the creative freedom of the FM if it was approved without his consent and approval. I had figured it would be commonplace, but it was moved before he was given the ability to check off on it. This was my bad. Apologies @Pancakei and @Wes, but I wish for this to be moved back to Character Applications until the FM has been given the chance to review it one final time and sign off on it.

As a patron and one of the most active drivers to push for Kudhacari within the setting, I find it pivotal that the FM be allowed to at least monitor them until a time where the individual Kudhacari isn't as impactful upon the species =3=7.

Legixuu~

 

[Wes]

Okay. What changes would you suggest to make this work for Pancake?

 

[raz]

Organization: Kudhacari Space Program

Being able to say "KSP" is a cute reference, but this "Lanus Mission" would have either been under the direction of a guild or the military. Something like the "Seekers Cohort" or "Cosmic Stellarists Association" or even "Lanus Exploratorium" could describe a science-based guild focused on off-world exploration. If you have any ideas in that vein, feel free to shoot one off.

This may seem weird because "what, they don't have a unified space program!?" But all guilds are inherently part of the government and represented within it, and are greatly under the command of the government because private business doesn't really exist as humans conceptualize it. So whatever you change the "organization" to will still basically fit the rest of what I've read.

On universal translators, she had a deep French accent.

While this is accurate, it's preferable that you try to describe her accent in prose and footnote "French accent" for clarity. France doesn't exist in the SARPiverse and we've tried to do away with direct references on wiki articles.

Personality

Pretty great here! I think her personality is one of the best Kudhacari so far (not to say others have been bad). She's community/species-minded but still obviously maintains individuality.

History/The Lanus Mission

The family detailing here is good. You seem to essentially understand what their family units are like, and even if you secretly don't, what you've written doesn't change how they work in any way :>

If she's existed long enough for the Kudhacari to want to venture beyond their system, that means she doesn't remember pre-unification or anything like that. She could conceivably be from 80-200 years after unification, though, which would be first-fourth generation after their global civil war ended. Just something to keep in mind. Society will have changed, obviously, but probably not radically from its fundamentals. She might even be more nationalistic than today's Kudhacari (which Dhaval, a weird individualist, is product of).

Lanus Mission stuff is on-point with what we've discussed and there are no problems there.

 

[Pancakei]

Apologies for taking so long to respond, I've been doing all kinds of busy stuff this weekend and it got washed out of my mind for a bit. I changed the Organization name and did some small changes here and there, nothing huge. Also changed the accent description the best I could.

 

[raz]

If those things are straightened out, then this is all green text and stuff from the FM angle.

 

[Legix]

As my interest was ensuring the FM/creator of the Kudhacari was well-involved, Raz's approval is all I was waitin' on.

Approved. Again.