Re: Jewel Ciranth
Let me approach this as a standard biography review, then.
Name: Given name still requires changing to maintain cultural consistency. Check out
Meaning of Names if you need inspiration.
Species: The structure I would suggest for this is | [[iromakuanhe]], [[Iromakuanhe:Eyr Ranr]] |. That's in wiki code, to be clear.
Everything between Species and Skills is up to par with what I'm looking for.
Skills: Again, her skills are not equivalent with the basic requirements for a soldier of the Vanguard in any position. The 'core' skills at the top, while they can influenced by upbringing, are things that Astral Vanguard characters are trained in.
Her domestic non-occupational skills are fine, however.
Items: Iroma currency is KD, and she starts out with 12000 of it.
Faction Manager Exhack rules that this biography still requires some work, but is close to approval if certain minor fixes are made. The player must post in this thread when it is ready to be re-reviewed.
Note: Organic clothing might be an interesting idea (one that I've been fussing over but am too busy to handle right now), but you'll have to submit it as a separate tech submission. If you want to discuss how to put it all together, contact my YIM at Grb2hack, or on the IRC channel. My handle is basically the same there.