Approved Character Kaosu Dasanteki

[Wolf Ward]

My second character. Hope he doesn't seem too much.

He's going to be an independant, if accepted he will be in Toshiro's Yggdrasil plot.

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... teki_kaosu

 

[Wolf Ward]

Any comments? Good OR Bad? Approve/disapprove?

 

[Doshii Jun]

I'll try and get to it by the end of the night. The history looks extensive, so I want to go through it for inconsistencies.

 

[Kai]

Well. He's quite the character... A ton of backstory, to be sure.

He's a bit of a Sue, and has way too much money, in my opinion.

Overall though, a very good job and a nicely done character. The History is probably a bit much, though.

But don't go entirely by what i say, my opinion hold very little value, as i'm not a character mod.

 

[Aendri]

Now, kai, you should know better than that. In the past Doshii has upheld just about every correction you've made.

But as to corrections, the only stuff I'm noticing is spelling, at least at the moment. Stuff like you need to change 'learnt' in the middle of the thrid para of you history, to 'learned'. Also, the grammar in some of you skills needs to be worked on. But overall, it's looks OK to me.

 

[Wes]

There were some parts I didn't like too much, and I don't think trying to break any current encryption would work in the RP, but there's nothing to hold the character back from approval.

Approved.

 

[Wolf Ward]

Thanks for the comments. Will keep them in mind.