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Approved Character Karus Katalan

Kai

Retired Staff
Inactive Member
Name: Karus Katalan


General Information

Species: Elysian (Plebeian)
Gender: Male
Age: 23

Family / Creators: Ismura Katalan (mother) Raphael Katalan (Father)

Employer: ECN
Occupation: marine
Rank: Semeai
Current Assignment:ECS Phalanx


Physical Characteristics

Height: 6'0
Weight: 125
Measurements:
Bra Size: N/A

Build and Skin Colour: Karus is very thin and lanky. That is not to say he is not muscular, simply lean. His skin is tanned, indicating his enjoyment of the outside world and being in the sun when not on duty in a starship. In contrast with his skin his wings are of the purest white and finely pruned.

Facial Features and Eye Colour: Though a Plebeian Karus has the sharply angled feature of a Patrician, perhaps suggesting some shameful fall from grace in his family's past. However his face is normally adorned with a warm smile and kindly look that would look alien on a Patrician. His eyes are a steely grey giving him a sense of depth to add to his kind features.

Hair Colour and Style: His hair is Grey and very long, coming to the small of his back. It is tied near the bottom in back, with the bangs cut very short. Two sections in front of his ears also come down to just above his waist, and have small golden clips at their ends. These are usually kept in front of his arms.

Distinguishing Features: Oddly, for a plebeian, Karus has fairly good sized white wings, which are just big enough to allow him to glide on occasion, when the winds are right. He is also slightly taller than many Plebeians.


Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Karus is a very kind person, And is Equally kind to everyone, even those he views as inferior. He is quick to befriend and very loyal to those he respects. Being a Plebeian, however, he has a natural tendency to be submissive around Patricians, but tries his best to not do so, as he views himself as nearly Patrician himself. Recently, the new strength he gained by joining the ECN has given him a better sense of self, and the idea that he is not inferior, making him rather brave, and calm even in stressful situations.

Likes: Travelling, The sun, Gliding on air currents and fixing things.
Dislikes: Being stationary, Overbearing people, people with superiority complexes, and dirtying his wings.
Goals: To travel as far and wide as possible, protect his nation and way of life.


History

Karus grew up being taught kindness. He was raised by a loving family and grew up rather happy. However, after a time he grew tired of staying in the city which was his home, and longed to travel. Knowing their son wished dearly to travel, his parents raised money for him to go on a trip. Seeing how he enjoyed this very much, but his family was poor, he decided to join the ECN so he could see the stars and travel with the government's Aureas. He also joined out of a wish to protect his nation, and therefore the lifestyle he grew up with.


Skills

Fighting : Karus is an exceptional combatant, with training in spears, swords, shields and given a gruelling training course upon joining the ECN. He is trained in pistols, rifles and grenades, and is capable of using all of these effectively and efficiently. He is also trained in the use of Aspis infantry shields. Karus has had training in Power Armor combat, as well.

Pilot (Powered Armour, Shuttles):Karus has been trained in the use of a Hikael Power Armour. He is capable of using it effectively and efficiently in combat. In addition, Karus is capable of piloting a shuttle, having been trained in the ability in case a dedicated shuttle pilot is unavailable. He can fly one, but not do anything fancy.

Communications: Karus is trained in using radio equipment, inter-ship communications, and issuing and following orders under normal circumstances, and while under fire. He is usually calm and collected when speaking, even under stressful situatuions.

Survival: Karus is trained to be capable of surviving on his own in the outdoors. He is capable of building shelters and starting fires when necesarry. He is capable of finding food in the wilderness, and capable of finding his way if long travel is needed.

Physical: Karus is trained in 'Pankration', the Elysian unarmed martial art which is partially wrestling. he is rather strong, and capable of lifting rather heavy objects. he has the stamina to run for miles without trouble, though at times he may use his wings to aid him.

Navigation: Loving travel, Karus spent much of his free time going over star maps and ground maps and learning how to read and use both. He is capable of finding his way using landmarks on the ground, and can successfully navigate a starship with the help of a calculator to find exact vectors, as he is not quite versed in mathematics himself.

Technology operation (Maintenence): Karus is trained in the ins and outs of his Hikael Power armor, and is capable of doing minor repairs in the field, with the proper tools, of course. he is also capable of diagnosing and fixing minor problems in most Elysian weaponry, once again with the proper tools necesarry, however.


OOC Notes

Something to note about his family's history is that one of his ancestors was a Patrician who fell from grace, making the family have many Patrician features, regardless of it's plebian status.

This character is possibly temporary, meant to help revive Elysia with it's new plot
 
Good job, kai. Here's something:

1. *Plebeian
2. Current Assignment would be the ECS Phalanx.
3. Kind of tall for Plebeian? Not sure, but I just wanted to note it.
4. Zakalwe will have to approve the larger-then-normal wings. I have no problem with it, but he's the boss on Elysians.
5. Minor spelling and grammar errors, but still very good.
6. Perhaps putting his ancient Patrician ancestry into his history could help?

This character can probably grow more within the plot. If Doshii and Zakalwe have no problem with it, then it should get approved. :)
 
1.'Kay
2. 'Kay
3. The Wiki says Plebeians are around 5'6" or so usually, so at 6' he IS rather tall
4. I went Over a lot of this with Zakalwe already, and he okayed the wings for me. I'll try and spell check it if possible.
5. 'Kay, I'll work on it.
6. It's not really HIS history, but it was somewhat noteable, so i put it in the comments at the bottom...
 
As usual, I defer to Thomas on this one, though I'll look over it for anything glaring to me.

This character is pending. The GM responsible for the character's faction will be the lead reviewer.
 
1, Karael might be better, keeping with the tradition of Elysian names ending with an -ael, however it's not the sort of thing to pend approval on. It also interests me than the second name is similar to the Chinese dialect :)

2, It should be noted that given a large amount of a plebeians short posture is due to poor nourishment and postures a marine is significantly taller than your average plebeian.

3, If you're not going to fill them in you can remove Measurements and Bra Size.

4, I've corrected the grammar of Build and Skin Colour:

"That is not to say he is not muscular, simply lean. His skin is tanned, indicating his enjoyment of the outside world and being in the sun when not on duty in a starship. In contrast with his skin his wings are of the purest white and finely pruned."

It's not something to hang an approval on, I just like to point out grammar when I review a biography.

5, I'll correct the grammar of the Facial Features and Eye Colour as well:

"Though a Plebeian Karus has the sharply angled feature of a Patrician, perhaps suggesting some shameful fall from grace in his families past. However his face is normally adorned with a warm smile and kindly look that would look alien on a Patrician. His eyes are a steely grey giving him a sense of depth to add to his kind features."

Accept it if you like it.

6, "short. Two" not "short.Two".

7, It should be noted that the average Plebeian in 5'11".

8, He should not view non-Elysians as his equals.

9, There's no real reason why he should try to not be submissive around Patricians. Very few Plebeians are at all rebellious or consider their social position to be unjust.

10, Full stop at the end of Likes.

11, Firstly - the main reason why someone would join the Celestial Navy would be a sense of duty and responsibility. Look up the concept of Kleos which is held dear by all Elysians. Even if seeing the stars is an important element, this should not be the solitary aim.

12, Also Elysians don't have dollars, they have the Aureas or As.

13, You might want to mention that he's trained in using the Hikael rather than just general 'power armour'.

Beyond on that this seems to be a really very nice character. Good work. If those issues, as there are resolved I see no issue preventing him being approved. Nice hair by the way.
 
"That is not to say he is not muscular, simply lean. His skin is tanned, indicating his enjoyment of the outside world and being in the sun when not on duty in a starship. In contrast with his skin[,] his wings are of the purest white and finely pruned."


"Though a Plebeian[,] Karus has the sharply[-]angled features of a Patrician, perhaps suggesting some shameful fall from grace in his [family's] past. However[,] his face is normally adorned with a warm smile and kindly look that would look alien on a Patrician. His eyes are a steely grey[,] giving him a sense of depth to add to his kind features."

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In the above I have performed further correcting of edited sections, regarding punctuation this time, all marked within [ ]. I don't have time to fully go over the bio now, but I noticed a few other things that need touched up. I'm assuming the capitalization of the words that don't need to be is intentional?
 
Thanks Zakalwe, Missing.

I'll work on fixing those things.

Also, the random capitalization is me subconciously putting emphasis on things I feel are important... I don't know how it started, but it's something I do and I can't really help it.

Edit: Fixed most of the problem things, but i have a few questions.

Why Can't he view Non-Elysians as Equals? Perhaps that line of thinking is part of what got his family kicked out of Patrician-ness?

Banking once again on the family downturn, He might view himself as being close enough to Patrician that he shouldn't really have to submit. Equality counts for everyone, anyway.

Also, he doesn't act this way to be rebellious, it's more of a thing caused by a higher than normal sense of self worth? not sure if that's the correct term but do you get what i'm trying to say?
 
Alright, let me put it this way:

If he views non-Elysians as equals he will be viewed as insane and never given any position of authority. The idea is simply that ingrained in Elysians. It's a fundamental component of their religion and one which is held as highly as the American concept of liberty and justice except more so. It is an absolutely unshakable belief - the only difference is in between the Elysians who are comparatively benevolent in their supremacy of those who are chauvinist and domineering.

I'll try and explain the concept.

You know that the Christian Church believes that man was created to have dominion over all the animals of the Earth? Thus he was charged with their upkeep and yet is in the same time superior to them - different from them. Elysians believe in much the same thing - their God has given them the universe and it is their vocation to bring everyone under their sway so that they can be eventually illuminated with the Truth. Indeed Elysians believe that there are almost two types of 'soul' in the universe - those of an Elysian and a non-Elysian - and that it is remarkably hard for a non-Elysian to compensate for their inherent spiritual weakness in order to reach their paradise.

As for viewing himself as nearly equal to a Patrician - perhaps. However he would then view himself as superior to Plebeians, there is no two-ways about this.
 
I would try to give a better example then Zakalwe's, but I doubt that I could. He knows a lot more about the Elysians and their culture then I do.
 
Allright, that explanation makes quite a bit of sense.. mostly I just want him to not be a jerk to anyone as i've seen elysians can apparently tend to be... Maybe that's an unfair assumption, but anyways, I'll tweak him a bit to see if he fits.
 
Alright, Doshii or Kim can give the final judgement now. Both I and Zak approve this character for IC use, but we need it to become official. :mrgreen:
 
Approved.

Zakalwe is welcome to approve any Elysian character.
 
Oh shit -- I thought that was clear! Sorry Thomas.

Wes is absolutely right on that one. I tend to specialize with Yamataian and Nepleslian characters; Kim can go the range; Thomas handles Elysia.
 
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