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Approved Submission ke-m6-w3406 Daisy Multipurpose Plasma Weapon

Kai

Kai

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Retired Staff
Submission URL
https://stararmy.com/wiki/doku.php?id=stararmy:weapons:ke-m6-w3406_daisy_multipurpose_plasma_weapon
Submission Type: Power Armor Accessory
Template Used: N/A
Submission WIP URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=stararmy:weapons:ke-m6-w3406_daisy_multipurpose_plasma_weapon
Submission Destination URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=stararmy:weapons:ke-m6-w3406_daisy_multipurpose_plasma_weapon

Faction: Yamatai
FM Approved Yet? No
Faction requires art? No

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? Yes, re-write of the Plasma Projector which was removed on the original creator's request

Notes: This is a rewrite/rename of the older Plasma Projector that was removed due to the original creator's request. It has been rewritten to provide the same information with different verbage, as well as a different name. Additionally, sections have been removed or reorganized for clarity.
 
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So right away I'm noticing a few things. I'd like to see some links made to stuff like the PEW made where it's first mentioned in the article, rather than later down in it. I'd also like to see some discharge information for the ranged modes.
 
I'll add the link earlier in the article. As for the discharge information, it is contained in the article under the headers "Muzzle flash and retort" as well as "plasma bolt"

Edit: there is a link to the PEW in the very first paragraph
 
This review is for: ke-m6-w3406 Daisy Multipurpose Plasma Weapon

The submitted article is/has…
[ x ] A very high level of overall quality
[ x ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[ x ] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[ x ] In the proper format/template
[ x ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ x ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[ x ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ x ] No red and/or broken links
[ x ] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ x ] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ x ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ x ] Obtusely redundant
[ x ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ x ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ x ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ x ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ x ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ x ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ x ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ x ] Lacking Detail
[ x ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[ x ] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ x ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ x ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ x ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
** Excellent article, Kai. It's perfect.

Status: Approved.
 
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