Approved Character Kitano Ai

Name: Kitano Ai


General Information

Species: NH-29 Nekovalkyrja
Gender: Female
Age: 5 months

Family / Creators: Star Army of Yamatai

Employer: Star Army of Yamatai
Occupation: Combat Arms
Rank: Santo Hei
Current Assignment:


Physical Characteristics

Height: 156 cm / 5'1
Weight: 43 kg / 94 lbs
Measurements:
Bra Size: A

Build and Skin Colour: Agile and supple, Ai is slightly shorter than the average neko, while her arms and legs are rather sinewy. Her skin is smooth and a fleshy pink.
Facial Features and Eye Colour: Ai features are sharp, yet still keep a youthful look. Her eyes are an icey blue.
Hair Colour and Style: Her hair is medium length, just going past the shoulders. She keeps her hair down, and decorates with a ribbon occasionally. Her hair is a silvery blue.

Distinguishing Features: Her genetic tatoo info is printed on the lower left back.

Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Ai is bi-polar at times, though not fully bi-polar.her moods shifting from one end of the spectrum to the other in a moment. She has a bit of a short temper, especially at those who complain about what she's doing.
But she isn't always moody, she is most of the time cheerful, often getting to (or past) the point where it can get annoying.
She is also quite eager and ready to learn new things.

In combat, Ai is rather Blithe, meaning that she is very happy and cheerful no matter what the situation, often to the dismay of her squadmates.

Likes: Sugary stuff, Food, people, getting better at something
Dislikes: Self-centered people, kill-joys
Goals: To serve the Star Army in its on-going war(s).


History

Created by the Star Army, Ai was observed for a brief period of time, watching for any defects, before she was sent to basic training. She was trained at Educational Facility 1, 'Ichiban.' She developed her skills required as a soldier here, as well as her love of learning. There, she discovered her affinty with handling and taking care of weapons of many kinds.


Skills

Fighting (Power Armor): Ai has had training on fighting with and without weapons, such as knives,energy pistols, grenades, and energy rifles, in Yamataian conditions and zero-gravity. She has also recieved more exstensive training on fighting with and using power armor.

Communication: Ai knows how to do basic radio operations, as well as communications with headsets, starships, power armor, and shuttles in both combat and non-combat conditions. She is also fluent in English and Japanese.She can speak and write both correctly and efficiently and can write reports, fill forms, issue orders under fire, etc. She also knows how to use telepathic communication.

Technology Operation: Ai is capable of operating any computer system that uses the Kessaku OS, found on all Star Army starships. She is proficient in entering and/or searching for information.

Mathematics: Ai has learned mathematics, up to and including algebra and trigonometry.

Maintenance and Repair: Taking apart and putting things back together here and there, Ai has the basic ideas of how to do minor repairs to some common weapons in the SAoY.

Culinary: Ai taught herself how to bake sweets (pastry stuffs); cookies, brownies, etc. She's not particularly good, but she can make some decent treats.

Rogue: To have fun with people, Ai has taken up a knack for pick-pocketing things from people, just to tease them. Though she usually gives it back.

Pssssst... you should make an Azorean. jk jk

Oh, my! This character sounds like it will be fun to watch. o_o It looks good to me. ^_^ Good luck!

This for the 17th as you were discussing prior?

Ya, this is for the 17th.

Very clean and cookie cutter.

I can't find anything wrong with it, but it's not anything special. She doesn't stand out as a PC as opposed to an NPC, which may actually make her stand out among PC's

Try expanding her personality a bit more to give her more flavor, 'kay?

*smacks Kai with a rolled-up magazine* Bad advice. Cookie cutter is beautiful. :[

Distinguishing Features: Her genetic tatoo info is printed on the back of her neck, unlike most nekos.

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Please explain why the tattoo location is different from the factory preset.

Also, please don't make her "special" for the sake of being special, or to please other players.

*smacks Yangfan with a newspaper* He was trying to be helpful.

Kai — and this goes for all non-staff reviewers! — while I appreciate what you're doing to help out, your wording makes it sound like you're ordering, not asking. You can suggest and recommend (which is good!), but only staff can order.

Lessee here ...

1. Yangfan's spot on with the tattoo. Please explain.

2. At times she can be depressed ... but she's almost always cheerful? *shakes head* Doesn't quite work; fake cheerful isn't really cheerful, if that's what you were going for. I can't really tell from this. Clarify more what she is.

3. The history is just a bit too lacking -- you can do better than that. I'm not saying you have to go all out, but give us a paragraph or two. Are you having trouble thinking of things? I'd start with what you've got. Her personality's different, so maybe something in her history determined that? Maybe about her Repair skill?

4. Skills:

a. Fighting is currently doubled up with some kind of Maintenance and Repair; please eliminate that line. Also, eliminate the line after; I don't know what "hand-controlled flight systems are," but if you want her to be a pilot, I would delete Rogue and put that in instead. That's just a suggestion though.

b. Her Repair skill ... OK, so she's good with guns, correct? Is that what I'm getting from this? She can fix'em, repair them, do some smith work?

Overall: Seems like a quickie. I understand that you want to dive into the plot, but this seems like you just want to get to the shooting and killing. Yes? Expound just a bit more -- it'll be worth it.

Also, how many characters do you have?

This character is pending.

1. Eh... don't know what I was thinking with that. Changed it to normal-ness. Probably did that when I was tired....

2. Changed a bit. I guess.

3. Expanded ever-so-slightly.

4. a. I copy and pasted the text. Its in the combat arms fighting skill description.

b. Just to small bits of work and stuff. Changed.


This would be my third.... But I'll make sure I'll keep my roleplay ability up. On a another site, a couple roleplays ended so before I already had a few characters. But now, since those are over, I'm putting more time into SA.

^_^; sorry...I didn't mean to order Kyoki around (i'm just so used to talking to her on IRC)

I know I don't hold any official sort of sway, but I like the personality more with the additions.

(Note to self: Become a stafff reveiwer )

Thanks Boss Drew; that's what I was going to ask for next.

The line about "hand-controlled" stuff is for Nepleslians, not Yamataians. Please remove it.

Also, for the record, you added one sentence to the history, and barely changed the personality at all. I think this is the smallest amount of effort ever put into a character by a veteran. If it weren't for Andrew, you'd be working on this a lot more.

This character is approved for IC usage, with exceptions. The character is required for a plot that is in-progress, so the review was expedited.

This is Kyoki's third character, with permission from Administrator Andrew to have a third slot.

Instead of an instant approval, I think I'd like to work on it some more if I may Doshii.

Sorry if it seemed like... crap. Minor b-issues this morning and I kinda got ahead of myself x_x.

It's OK; you can work on it through the wiki. Just post here when you're done working on it.

We all have those issues, Kyoki; it's understood. I was just surprised.

Okays. Well... i updated the first post, wondering if it looks good, or at least better, now.

It's a little better now.