LL, welcome to Star Army. I'm Doshii Jun, the main character reviewer for the site.
The most prominent thing about your bio that needs changing has nothing to do with the character. The art currently associated with your character needs to come down — we use only original content here on the SARP.
Otherwise, the character you've got is pretty basic, which is how we prefer players to start. I'll go more in-depth early tomorrow, but for now, focus on reading into a plot you want to join. Most of the Yamataian plots are open to you.