This review is for: (the)Colluctance Martial Art
The submitted article is/has…
[Y ] A very high level of overall quality
[Y ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ N] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[ YYY] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[Y ] In the proper format/template
[ Y] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[ ] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[Y ] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[ Y] No red and/or broken links
[ Y] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[ Y] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[N ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[N ] Obtusely redundant
[ N] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ N] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
@Wes
[ N] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ N] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[N ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ N] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ N] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ N] Lacking Detail
[N ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[ N] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ N] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[ N] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ N] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
A bit of a grammar bug in the first sentence, "...this martial art of the kuvexian species..." is an incomplete sentence. (This
is a martial art would complete it, or perhaps adding a bit onto the end of the sentence describing its specialty?)
The history section is kind of confusingly worded-is there one distinct origin or is the origin ambiguous?
Status: Pending
I intend to finish this review by: Wednesday if not earlier.