This review is for: Caernarfon Shipyard Drone
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[X] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[X] In the proper format/template
[X] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[X] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[X] Obtusely redundant
[X] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[X] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[X] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[X] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[X] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[X] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[X] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[X] Lacking Detail
[X] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[/] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[X] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[X] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[X] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Status: This submission is in progress.
1. The intro repeats some of the text in the first graf of the “about” section. Just need to delete one or the other. (I recommend rewriting the intro.)
2. Can you include the link to the Enhanced Subspace Wake Drive?
3. “As units are docked together, the range and speed of hyperspace fold systems improve cumulatively.” <— I’m pretty sure this violates the starship speed standards.
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=starship_speed_standard
4. “In practice, the Caernarfon is more than capable of creating the
Combined Field System - improving the mobility, defense, and offense of the Caernarfon, though this system usually isn't activated until a threat is identified due to the extra strain placed on the generator, and components of the drone.”
Lazarus says that while the firmware for this upgrade is freely available on their servers, there’s a couple caveats — namely, that doing so reclassifies the unit as a weapon, which means Yamatai gets understandably pissed at their trade act being violated.
(Not sure how that happens, as Yamatai’s essentially produces aether beams, but eh).
I’m thinking this needs to be changed to highlight the firmware upgrade.
5. Why is it named after a Welsh town?