Ok, first off with the simple stuff; can you put a link to the year it was introduced and the manufacture into the intro-paragraph under the title header? An example of this would be the
Mindy's first sentence under the topic header. I think you only need the first, second and final sentence in the current header you have here.
Second, you don't have to worry about the DR and Speed Osaka - that will be, instead, dependent on the ships or other vehicles it will be mounted on.
Third, get rid of the imgur links - the images need to be hosted here on the site I believe. We used to have links to Photobucket, but for one reason or another, we had a witch hunt eliminating all of them and hosting all images here. Don't know why, but that's how it is now.
Finally, the article is too complex for the average layperson to read and quickly understand. 'Technobabble' they call it. I'll try to walk through simplifying this article piece by piece if needed, so forgive me if the pacing is slow;
We can start off in the 'Mechanism' area of the article I believe; in the first paragraph, we are best breaking it into several sentences, rather than having the one as it is. Have one sentence explaining that it accelerates the condensate. Then, have another sentence state that this is done by a method very similar to an electric motor, and finally, have a third explain that this is possible due to the magnetically responsive material inside the condensate. The explanation of what a Bose-Einstein Condensate is dropped, and is not needed here I believe.
You can go on ahead and edit other paragraphs as well, but I won't continue on to fixing the rest of the article in this post because I don't want it to become a gargantuan laundry list that may risk overwhelming you. We'll break it down into layman's terms piece by piece if that's alright.
