[LAZARUS] Molecular Applicator

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Osaka has kept me appraised as to this design concept, and I give and confirm my approval as a faction manager.

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Doc, please don't use colors in your message as that might give off the semblance that the tech was approved when it hasn't been approved.

I'll take a gander at this later.

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Not to cut Kyle off, but I'll tentatively warn you the submission is waaay too short and incomplete if you intend this to be used ICly. You should add a brief on usage, appearance.

I'm also leery of giving the Lorath literally perfect manufacturing abilities, or references to it being radically better than basically everything currently used in the setting. Bombastic language is a definitely red flag on the review checklists.

Basically, this article needs to be more than the "About" section, and should have sufficient detail that any player would know how to write about it if it came up in their RP.

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Cool beans. I was unsure what needed clarifying upon, hence why I wanted your feedback.

The issue with it is the yield isn't especially high so some operations have to be repeated more than once to get them right. The price of precision is that things take much longer to produce.

Bombastic language will be fixed.

You should add a brief on usage, appearance.

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Okay.

sufficient detail that any player would know how to write about it if it came up in their RP.

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Okay.

Thanks :3



Okay, I've made some changes. Mind going over them for me?

I've mentioned that the level of precision directly affects the yield time meaning while it is a very high precision bit of kit, it is actually very slow so more than one device will likely have to be used. I've also mentioned that in lower precision tasks, things can be rushed (making for some speedy manufacture) but the object will be irradiated, which has problems of its own.

Its also worth noting that um... Prior to this, Lazarus doesn't have any manufacturing capabilities of their own and have been relying on renting equipment owned by the UOC. They do however, have experience designing fabrication equipment.

And ... It should be noted that Lazarus isn't explicitly tied to a single nation. This isn't 'giving the Lorath the capability to manufacture on this scale', this is 'giving EVERYONE the capability to manufacture on this scale'.

I'm trying to work out a good price for such a device. Any ideas?

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

OsakanOne said:

Cool beans. I was unsure what needed clarifying upon, hence why I wanted your feedback.

The issue with it is the yield isn't especially high so some operations have to be repeated more than once to get them right. The price of precision is that things take much longer to produce.

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I would be pretty okay with this, except there's no way to implement this in the submission. And Doc could easily just retrofit a few hundred of the mothballed multi-KM shipyards the Lorath currently own and produce more raw exoticpretentiouslatinium than the site really needs or is currently possible.

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

If you want, I could be all "Nope, you can't use this. You have to go through me first" and stuff" with Doc -- he is pretty aggressive with that sorta thing so if I hold him in check, would that be cool?

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Couple of things.
The Title of the thread should reflect the title of the article.

YOu call this Neutron Applicator multitool, but the page is called Project Caledfwlch.

Second, the article lacks details, you say it uses "nuclear fission or nuclear fusion to cut or seal matter very precisely without interference. "

Nuclear fission results in a burst of energy, and breaks the object into pieces. And those pieces tend to fly off in uncontrolled fashion into other molecules.

That same is true of Nuclear fusion, there is a considerable about of energy given off.

Neither of these processes is really going to give you a precision cutting or sealing process. Not to mention that the effectiveness is directly affected by the density of the material you are trying to work.

Re: [LAZARUS] Neutron Applicator multitool

Updated and addressed. For the most higher resolution work, doppler cooling will be used.

Stuff to fix: The overview paragraph is missing, leaving the area immediately below the title header blank. The "about" section is a sentence fragment. Pricing and the in-character year of manufacture is missing.

Thank-you Wes :3

*wonders off to fix*

Hey um... On paper, what do you think a good price for a product like this would be?

Hello?