This review is for: Motiva behavior modification drugs
The submitted article is/has…
[ x ] A very high level of overall quality
[ x ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[N/A] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[No Template Established] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[-] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[NO LINKS AT ALL] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[-] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[OK] Obtusely redundant
[OK] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[OK] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[OK] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[OK] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[OK] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[OK] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[OK] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[OK] Lacking Detail
[OK] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[Yes - Needs to be wikified!] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[N/A] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
**Needs to be wikified!!
Status: Pending
Notes
- This article really needs to be wikified. The absence of wikification really brings this well written article down in quality.
- Also, what would like to see is a brief listing of what species these drugs have an effect on. The chemistry and biology of each species is unique, so I feel it should be pointed out what the effects would be on the at least a few of the major species on the site to assume these drugs would effect all species the same would be Overpowered. It also helps players understand how these drugs work.
Other than the two mentioned items -- it is well written. A good submission overall and has some potential in terms of plot aspects as mentioned by Fred prior.
I intend to finish this review by: Pending your changes.