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Approved Character Lillius

Soresu

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Lillius

Note for Doshii: I've gotten permission from Osakan to play a Sourcian, and from Tomoe to use her as a plot element in the Maras, and new Lorath plot coming up. Both are more then welcome and very much well within their rights to pop in to confirm these two things I'd also like for Tiff as well as Christen to pop in to have their say if they so choose. However, some of the stuff is lacking like the History (Inventory and no Money as well), I left an explanation in there for you, and hope you take it into consideration given the situation. ^^;
 
Tomoe liek loli goo gurlz

Ahem, I mean. I do enjoy the concept of this unique Sourcian character. Her age and characteristics will prove to be an interesting spice to the Maras plot.
 
I've got a little time now.

I'm not going to reject this character, and I'm loathe to be possibly being slapped with the brush that other folks who dislike the Lorath are painted with.

However. This is being turned in as a player character. Treating it like any other player character, I cannot approve it.


  • 1. The character's history is purposely being withheld for the purposes of a plot.

    2. The race the character belongs to has vast portions that seem to either be unapproved or unsubmitted; in fact, the race is not approved for PCs at all.

    3. The skills — indeed, the very physiology — of the character is entirely overpowered compared to any other character in this setting, including Yui.

With that out of the way, let's talk. Though it's turned in as a player character, Soresu states at the bottom of the article:

  • "Please keep in mind the lack of overt detail is due to the fact a majority of the stuff missing can only be revealed ICly in the new Lorath Plot along with Maras as Lillius is a plot device for both."

Plot devices are not player characters. They're NPCs. That includes Yui, and possibly Hanako, in case those were possible counterexamples. I'm open to this character being an NPC, in the hands of a qualified GM (which Soresu is). The distinction is important, as the Sourcian race is not approved to be a PC race.

This submission is pending.
 
Status has been changed prior to my cursing ans casting voodoo spells on the wiki to get it moving from the clunky slowness at the moment.
 
This GM-level non-player character is approved for IC usage for GM Soresu. The character is restricted to NPC status only. The player-GM can revisit this character after the conditions stated above change.
 
Some edits I want made. Don't follow them to the letter but treat them as a guide-line or suggestion. This is generally the kind of depth and level of information I expect here, regardless of how much has been defined ICly:

This stuff means almost nothing to me until I actually see just how you choose as a writer and roleplayer to express her and I believe that's where the magic is.

You narrate and define her with your choices of words and your own thoughts and choices of action and motivation.

The character guide is just so other players have a loose expectation of expression and know she isn't some kind of off-the-wall Gaia-roleplay character who has no more than a single line of motivation and feeling who turns out to be a super-imposition of the writer.


They fix the over-powered factor and give her some more depth based on what you've described her to be.

Normally, I'm not very good with this sort of thing but tonight I seem to be on something of a roll. Again, take it all with a grain of salt and feel free to talk to me if you have any problems with my suggestions below.

Characteristics

  • Background

    • Sourcian encounters around the outer-colonies for brief periods of time (no longer than a minute) are increasingly common - vessels jumping in before jumping out again (usually on the run from forces unknown).
      Originally, she was bonded to a small craft which did not survive the capture process when attacked and taken onboard a Red-Faction vessel of unknown registration. On extraction, she was then moved to an Occhestran research facility at an unknown location for further study.

    Psychological

    • Lilliaus is a hunter, a born monster with the chosen form of a child. It is difficult to differentiate exactly which she is and which she isn't - one on hand, she is naturally inquisitive and capable of being very gentle - sometimes even inappropriately sensual. Other times, she is violent, cruel and surprisingly sadistic (which comes as a shock to many). This behavior can be put down to the frustration of her environment and dislike of her captors, often playing mind-games to spite them.

      Particularly, she is earnest. She sees all and observes everything before making her decisions and is very very motivated, regardless of her chosen task (whether academic or butchering Occhestran guards and attempting escape).




    Likes: Warmth, New experience, Concentrated Sugar, Spicy food, "the living inanimate" (machinery).
    Dislikes: Humanoids, Bitter or Bland Tasting feed, Being idle, the cold, loud and sudden sounds or flashes

    Motivations: Survival, Curiosity (this can be used against her with traps but the same trap will never work twice without a bluff), Freedom, Self-Understanding (she knows little or nothing of what or who she is).
    Goals: To find what is beyond "this place".


    Physical

    • Build & Skin colour

      • Lillius has the body of child and thus the physique of one. She is very lean and possesses very pale skin. She understands the basics of body-morphing and has been observed changing her body in ways particularly inappropriate for her observed age (hips, buttocks, bust, etc) in study of humanoid females (though this is very rare).

      Facial features and eye color:

      • Lilliaus is undeniably friendly in appearance, even as she does her worst. Her smile is disarming and appears very honest. From her mildly high cheek bones, pert nose to her pale rosy wet lips. She is even capable of seduction, her palette of expression freely moving from that of a child to that of an adult.
        Her eyes are a dull orange in color (a sign of captivity), flecks of amber and pale ruby breaking the coloration up.

      Distinguishing features:

      • When agitated or frightened, red markings can sometimes be observed around the edges of Lillius eyes, cheeks and collar-bones. They appear comparable in many ways to Sol. Egyptian history.

      Forms:

      • Hostile/Env
        Lillius lacks the required training to take this form.

        Sweet Talking
        Lillius is well versed in getting what she wants and has a particular form which makes many many tiny changes to her appearance. The net result is a slightly more mature body, hips somewhat wider and thighs better defined with more adult characteristics across her body (bumping her up from the appearance of perhaps twelve to a poorly developed 15 year old).


    • Skills


      • Fighting:
        EDIT: Desired meaning:

        • She's agile, quick and packs a punch but possesses sloppy technique and complete unawareness to techniques like suppression, holds and action designed to disable your opponent.
          This of course means she is particularly vulnerable to this style of fighting, provided her strengths can be overcome.
          Her fighting method might be comparable to the xenomorphs of alien, relying implicitly on the opening action to get the job done - she is unprepared for sustained combat.


        Humanities
        EDIT:
 
And this is why Sourcian shouldn't be a PC race. You've practically rewritten the entire character. That's just wrong. It shows, to me, that they're too poorly defined for a player to just walk in and use them as a character.

Regardless, Osaka, if she becomes an player character, she'll do so without approval. I don't know if you care about that or not. But regardless, and I state this officially so all can see it, Sourcians are not an approved PC race, and until they are, no Sourcian character should have PC status. Can't stop Rebeka, but I can and will stop any others.
 
Sourcians are not an approved PC race, and until they are, no Sourcian character should have PC status.
I'm with Doshii.
 
Hey, I'm happy with her NPC status, as long as I get a chance to play her, and develop a character to my specific tastes and choices I'm content without the PC status. Doshii gave me the chance , and I fully intent to take him up on it and do what I first came on the SARP to do. Have fun RPing. Some of the things Osa wrote down expanded on what I tried to do with what I knew, and it helps in lending more depth and intrigue to her in my mind that I was unable to capture, others are taking away entirely, but ICly characters are subject to change given their environments and stimuli.
 
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