I'll go ahead and
Review this article. Personally, I find the idea of a Rage-F* virus amusing and likely to contribute to the setting, so I'll use what I know from LVN class to help too. Overall, the idea is sound, but the article writing itself needs a lot of work. Beacause of this, the way I'll review this is go from top to bottom and list the issues as I see them. Overall, I'll assume that this is somewhat modeled after or inspired by Ebola as well for obvious reasons.
Name wise, I suggest that it the article title be called something like "Aspertye Vayaeus Virus", as it immediately informs the reader that it is likely a disease. My reasoning for this is that the current name tells the reader nothing about what it is. Though a namespace change would be better, it's not necessary, especially due to the tedium involved.
For the first paragraph, I highly recommend having it immediately start by saying that this is a hemorrhagic fever first and foremost, followed by a death rate that's given in percent. 90%, or 9 out of every 10 infected, is likely a good starting point depending on what you're after. The taxonomy should not go first as it is right now, since to the common reader it is not important whatsoever. It can even be completely left out and there would be no negative consequence unless this is specifically stated in RP or something, at which point it should likely go in the "About and/or History Section", which isn't here.
Only having a History section should be enough, since there's not much else to be said in an About. The line about cases in controlled conditions, 200 years or so, and separatist territories should go under the History section. Reading over the article, I firmly believe that this disease would have a very colorful and terrifying history and am disappointed that it does not have one at this time - I suggest writing it to entertain using lots of euphemisms and suggestions as to what it did through the times, but that's my own taste.
With Symptoms and Mechanism, the header should be at level four, not the current three for better organization of the article and to specifically indicate that the L'manel falls under this. Subsequently, Vectors, Exploitation and Policy should have level 4 headers as well, to indicate that they do not fall under Symptoms and Mechanism. I highly recommend that this section be broken into a Symptoms section, and a Pathophysiology section which details how the disease does what it dose. For just the Symptoms though, just detail what can be observed from the patient only and not why. I also suggest the symptoms be given some more specific time ranges to get a better idea of its progression as the infection proceeds. List the symptoms exhibited by ALL vulnerable hosts here. L'manel specific symptoms go into the section you already have. I recommend checking how Ebola's symptoms was written on wikipedia. For the cytokine storm specifically, it's best to say that when the very high fever, swelling and redness caused by the disease occurs, the deaths happen, followed by your preferred percentage. Saying that it's a feedback loop between cell markers and attacking immune cells that causes this goes into the pathophysiology - there's not even a need to use complex language and say it's a cytokine storm. That detail isn't familiar or pertinent to readers. The dormancy of the virus should go into the Vectors section.
The L'manel Symptoms, like the standard Symptoms, has too much Pathophysiology, or the how of the disease, here. That should go in its own section. That means that the whole organic compound part can be taken out and moved. Also, I don't think aspectation is a word. If you meant aspiration, I suggest you correct that. For the symptom list, again, try and put some time ranges for how these progress and develop. Also, the rabidness and estrus-like behavior gives a lose idea of its nature, but not the degree of the symptoms. Is the patient sitting there, drooling and twitching while being easily aroused, or is the patient actively attempting to beat down and violently initiate copulation with others similar to an infected from "28 Days Later"? Also, if this feature isn't exclusive to the L'manel only, it needs to go into the main section. I'd personally prefer it to affect all of the patients in this way and broaden the danger, but that is my own opinion only - if this is taken however, this means the main section and subsection can be likely wrapped up together and simplify the article.
The Pathophysiology section I suggest you make, as I mentioned before, would detail how the disease causes its symptoms. If necessary, it should have its own subsection with a level 3 heading for the L'manel for only the differences they exhibit in the process. It would naturally consist of all the pathophsyiology taken out of the other sections it should not be in.
And at this point, I now realize I have just put a massive wall of text on top of you, and for that, I am sorry. Because of that, I'll stop here for now - tell me how you do
@OsakanOne
