As my title says, I need help with my Lorath character. He hasnt been approved yet, and I dont know what to fix and change other than the name thanks to Herri, and Vesper ^^ Ive asked them about it, but both have been busy, and I dont want to bother them anymore than I have to, so if anyone here can help me, this is my character so far:
Name: Kor'Orin Occhestan
Off World Name: Watcher
General Information
Species: Lorath
Gender: Male
Age: 38 (Looks 19)
Family / Creators: Mother: Mor'Shran Occhestan Father: Kar'Oris Occhestan
Employer: Lorath
Occupation: Occhestan (Cook / Psychologist)
Rank: None
Current Assignment: None
Physical Characteristics
Height: 4'8"
Weight: 100 lb.
Measurements: Eh?
Bra Size: He's a dude ^^;
Build and Skin color: Being slim of build with light brown skin, his body is physically fit, though not enough to give him bulging muscles.
Facial Features and Eye color: Hazel colored eyes with a short trimmed go tee, and mustache. His face is smooth, and remains some what emotionless.
Hair color and Style: Short, jet black hair
Distinguishing Features: His black, raven like wings.
Psychological Characteristics
Personality:
Overall, Kanon is pretty quiet and tends to keep to himself unless needed for other tasks. He would rather stay to the side lines and simply watch as others go about their business as he tries to live his own life as best as he can. His main goal in life is to serve his race as best as he can with what skills he has. He is completely fascinated with the mind and how it works, and varies from race to race, so he mostly reads whatever books he can find on the mind, or observes others as they go about their lives. He prefers the company of women more so than men, not because he does not like them, but simply because he is used to being around the opposite sex given most of his caretakers were female.
Likes: Psychology, reading, writing, drawing, and cooking
Dislikes: Narrow minded people, discriminators and sexists
Goals: To obtain a perfect understanding of all races and how their minds work
History
Born and raised on one of the earlier space colonies, both his parents were researchers at the time, constantly working to better Lorath's future for their son, while at the same time, neglecting him do to their work. Some time after his birth, the moment his mother was well enough to start, she was sent straight back to work as well as his father. For the first five years of his life, he would be raised through maids and varies servants hired by his parents to look after him, with little contact with his true family. By the time he was old enough for elementary schooling, he did not really fit in well with other children whenever he was actually around them because of his shy and quiet nature. With nothing else better to do during those times alone and away from his studies, he took to reading whatever books he found lying around the house, or in book shelves, and drawing to pass the time. sooner or later, he did manage to live in a stable environment where his parents could give him a little bit more attention after, by that time, eight years of neglect. Finally, at the age of fourteen and now attending high school, he had learned to be more social with others though he preferred keeping to himself still, spending his time in the library with his nose in a book. During those times when he did actually hang out with others whom called him "friend", he simply stayed to the back as he watched and observed their actions and methods of living and interacting with each, thus sparking his interest in the mind and how others thought. How men and women reacted to each other interested him the most, and was a study he looked into allot, and even went so far as practice certain "things" with female companions who would allow him to. Soon after high school was over, he planned on attending college, but other things had been planned for him within the military. Though he was unsure of what, he hoped his study of varies skills would come in handy, and that he would not have to play a major role in any military actions, preferring to stay to the side lines.
Skills
Art and Vocations (Drawing): Through constant practice during his free time, Kanon has always drawn as a pass time on those days where he simply could find nothing else to do. Liking it so much, he has put allot of effort into learning the tricks of the trade when it comes to such an art.
Communications (Writing and Speaking): Communications is a skill he picked up during his schooling years, and was made to learn and practice for at least an hour a day by his parents. For thirty minutes, he normally had to write a journal entry, or a paper on a certain subject, ranging from "How his day went", to "The importance of education". Though not his most favorite thing in the world, he eventually learned how to communicate properly with others enough to fit in with society if he so wished to.
Entertainment (Sexual Techniques): A skill picked up during his time in high school, being around his group of friends taught him a few things in this area, especially from the females, given 75% of the group was female to begin with. During his hanging out with this group, they would normally sneak into abandoned homes and places like that where they experimented on each other. Though it never went as far as full blown sex, allot of intimacy and closeness took place.
Fighting (Martial Arts): This skill he learned from attending a martial arts school three times a week that was open to the general public. While there, he learned the basics of self defense, as well as disarming your opponent, and escaping from danger
Humanities (Psychology and Philosophy): Starting at a young age, some of the books he read touched on both psychology as well philosophy. Though he was still a bit young to understand at that age, it did eventually spark his interest during his high school years as he observed his friends and others around him. Eventually, he signed up to take classes on both subjects and, in turn, he found his calling in life in the understanding of the mind. From that point on, he has read whatever books he could on the subjects while making observations of whatever people and races he could. This ranged from interaction between men and women, to how people greeted each other, and the way they did so
Knowledge (Memory): Instead of writing things down, he attempted to commit things to memory, or solve problems in his head. This started in elementary school when a teacher brought to mind that using technology to solve certain problems was good, but so was learning how to remember, and solve them on your own without the use of machinery. From there, his teachers basically attempted to have the students go by memory instead of calculators, notebooks, and other things. Afterwards, this method stuck with him, and is used even until this day
Domestic (Cook): This was something he lad to learn on his own through trail and error over the course of his life whenever he either did not have the money to eat out, or his parents were not home to cook. Eventually, he learned to like cooking, and wished to try many new dishes in his life, so whenever he went food shopping, he always made a list of possible dishes to cook. Though not all of his food tasted the way it should have at first, as time went on, his skills in the area grew
Name: Kor'Orin Occhestan
Off World Name: Watcher
General Information
Species: Lorath
Gender: Male
Age: 38 (Looks 19)
Family / Creators: Mother: Mor'Shran Occhestan Father: Kar'Oris Occhestan
Employer: Lorath
Occupation: Occhestan (Cook / Psychologist)
Rank: None
Current Assignment: None
Physical Characteristics
Height: 4'8"
Weight: 100 lb.
Measurements: Eh?
Bra Size: He's a dude ^^;
Build and Skin color: Being slim of build with light brown skin, his body is physically fit, though not enough to give him bulging muscles.
Facial Features and Eye color: Hazel colored eyes with a short trimmed go tee, and mustache. His face is smooth, and remains some what emotionless.
Hair color and Style: Short, jet black hair
Distinguishing Features: His black, raven like wings.
Psychological Characteristics
Personality:
Overall, Kanon is pretty quiet and tends to keep to himself unless needed for other tasks. He would rather stay to the side lines and simply watch as others go about their business as he tries to live his own life as best as he can. His main goal in life is to serve his race as best as he can with what skills he has. He is completely fascinated with the mind and how it works, and varies from race to race, so he mostly reads whatever books he can find on the mind, or observes others as they go about their lives. He prefers the company of women more so than men, not because he does not like them, but simply because he is used to being around the opposite sex given most of his caretakers were female.
Likes: Psychology, reading, writing, drawing, and cooking
Dislikes: Narrow minded people, discriminators and sexists
Goals: To obtain a perfect understanding of all races and how their minds work
History
Born and raised on one of the earlier space colonies, both his parents were researchers at the time, constantly working to better Lorath's future for their son, while at the same time, neglecting him do to their work. Some time after his birth, the moment his mother was well enough to start, she was sent straight back to work as well as his father. For the first five years of his life, he would be raised through maids and varies servants hired by his parents to look after him, with little contact with his true family. By the time he was old enough for elementary schooling, he did not really fit in well with other children whenever he was actually around them because of his shy and quiet nature. With nothing else better to do during those times alone and away from his studies, he took to reading whatever books he found lying around the house, or in book shelves, and drawing to pass the time. sooner or later, he did manage to live in a stable environment where his parents could give him a little bit more attention after, by that time, eight years of neglect. Finally, at the age of fourteen and now attending high school, he had learned to be more social with others though he preferred keeping to himself still, spending his time in the library with his nose in a book. During those times when he did actually hang out with others whom called him "friend", he simply stayed to the back as he watched and observed their actions and methods of living and interacting with each, thus sparking his interest in the mind and how others thought. How men and women reacted to each other interested him the most, and was a study he looked into allot, and even went so far as practice certain "things" with female companions who would allow him to. Soon after high school was over, he planned on attending college, but other things had been planned for him within the military. Though he was unsure of what, he hoped his study of varies skills would come in handy, and that he would not have to play a major role in any military actions, preferring to stay to the side lines.
Skills
Art and Vocations (Drawing): Through constant practice during his free time, Kanon has always drawn as a pass time on those days where he simply could find nothing else to do. Liking it so much, he has put allot of effort into learning the tricks of the trade when it comes to such an art.
Communications (Writing and Speaking): Communications is a skill he picked up during his schooling years, and was made to learn and practice for at least an hour a day by his parents. For thirty minutes, he normally had to write a journal entry, or a paper on a certain subject, ranging from "How his day went", to "The importance of education". Though not his most favorite thing in the world, he eventually learned how to communicate properly with others enough to fit in with society if he so wished to.
Entertainment (Sexual Techniques): A skill picked up during his time in high school, being around his group of friends taught him a few things in this area, especially from the females, given 75% of the group was female to begin with. During his hanging out with this group, they would normally sneak into abandoned homes and places like that where they experimented on each other. Though it never went as far as full blown sex, allot of intimacy and closeness took place.
Fighting (Martial Arts): This skill he learned from attending a martial arts school three times a week that was open to the general public. While there, he learned the basics of self defense, as well as disarming your opponent, and escaping from danger
Humanities (Psychology and Philosophy): Starting at a young age, some of the books he read touched on both psychology as well philosophy. Though he was still a bit young to understand at that age, it did eventually spark his interest during his high school years as he observed his friends and others around him. Eventually, he signed up to take classes on both subjects and, in turn, he found his calling in life in the understanding of the mind. From that point on, he has read whatever books he could on the subjects while making observations of whatever people and races he could. This ranged from interaction between men and women, to how people greeted each other, and the way they did so
Knowledge (Memory): Instead of writing things down, he attempted to commit things to memory, or solve problems in his head. This started in elementary school when a teacher brought to mind that using technology to solve certain problems was good, but so was learning how to remember, and solve them on your own without the use of machinery. From there, his teachers basically attempted to have the students go by memory instead of calculators, notebooks, and other things. Afterwards, this method stuck with him, and is used even until this day
Domestic (Cook): This was something he lad to learn on his own through trail and error over the course of his life whenever he either did not have the money to eat out, or his parents were not home to cook. Eventually, he learned to like cooking, and wished to try many new dishes in his life, so whenever he went food shopping, he always made a list of possible dishes to cook. Though not all of his food tasted the way it should have at first, as time went on, his skills in the area grew
