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Approved Character [Lorath] - Demoman Ah'Kin Gotz "Blast" Lmanel

Ah, good to see you get it started Luca! There are a few tweeks here and there we can talk about on YIM later. Just be sure to catch me before it gets rather late. My sleep pattern is favoring earlier hours lately. (Midnight, rather than 4AM)
 
Don't worry gamer, I'm doing this one section at a time.

I'll poke Tomoe to look at this when I've finished everything.
 
Okay, I'm ready for evaluation - Hit it!
 
BUSTIN' IN!

:ugeek:

Well lessee.

As much as I am poor at measurements already, we Amerikans don't touch your Ausie/Euro increments. So I have no idea if thats good but I'll assume.

... Then you put it up further down, blast you. Oh well. Thats fine.

The description makes me want to swat you for going semi-TF2 in some aspects. :lol: In anycase, not much there, but fine.

Oi! Personality tis fine save for the language! No no no, ya don't just... Pick that up like that. Maybe some words and phrases but... Not a language.

History bit is fine, although you'd think there'd be other things other than dynamite.

Skills! Demo is fine, of course. Art tis fine and you get a cookie for taking it. Physical is fine. And so on. All a little small, though.

You might wanna toss in, in the personality, that he likes when things blow up or such, because he seems to really enjoy it.

Your stuff is fine, however as I did with Annie's; You have no weapon skill. Remember that.

And no you can't suddenly learn how to fire a weapon with a good deal amount of skill over one JP or whatever. Then why would we bother with skills? :roll: Mostly a note to Taco then yourself on the latter part.

WELL I SUPPOSE THAT THIS GETS THE YELLOW TEXT.

Need some work, look over the above comments.


Theres a lovely shade of yellow for yellow text...
 
Well look at me waltzing in here with a head full of eye-balls!

I've evaluated the bio, and I find that everything there is acceptable. The character is supposed to be bare bones, since he is young and new.

As for the language... with repeated exposure and through the use of Lorath technological aids, its completely feasible that Blast learned the way he did.

Also;



But honestly, I give my green stamp as Lorath GM, Tiff must give the second half.
 
Okay!
Toned down the language bit, so he knows some rudimentary phrases of Trade here and there rather than full language. He's a learning man.

And Gamer, it's one of his short-term Goals to see a good explosion come together. His Long Term goal is to serve.

Also, I'll flesh out the skills a little more when I got the chance.

QUOTY!
(Upon blasting something to bits with minimal mess) "Heh heh heh, it never gets old!"
 
Mm... Alrighty.

Green light, hit the dirt. Then stand up and clean yourself off, gawd, you just hit some dirt. Very poor exercise. In anycase, tis approved.
 
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