Lorath Hand-to-hand combat

[ShotJon]

Submission Type: Setting Element
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=lo ... rtial_arts

Faction: Lorath
FM Approved Yet?- No


For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? - No
Contains New art? - no
Previously Submitted? - No

Notes:

I would like to start and do little tidbits like this for Lorath. DocTomoe needs to look at this, but I plan to do more then just this one.

 

[Wes]

Please spellcheck this article and make the title header H1 instead of H2. Please add links where appropriate, such as Searing Blade and Fyunnen (which should be capitalized each type it appears).

 

[Luca]

Spellchecked, grammar checked and properly formatted by yours truly.

 

[Wes]

Approved.

Edit: Moved back to NTSE. I forgot to get FM approval.

 

[OsakanOne]

There's a few contradictions between this and some things that DocTomoe and Tiff mentioned in the past.

I don't specifically know what they are but I think they need to be resolved before he'll do the whole FM-Approval thing.

Oh and why isn't he posting?

Hell if I know.

Personally, I really like the submission, Shotty :3

Nice, easy to read, well rounded, informative and to the point!

 

[ShotJon]

It needs to be re-worked a bit I am working on it. Doc just stole my enthusiasm a bit, but I will get around to it.

 

[Wes]

Any updates?

 

[Luca]

It looks complete and acceptable to me, but we still haven't gotten FM approval. (And I'm wondering if at this point we need it)

 

[DocTomoe]

Despite some tweaks being needed as ShotJon and I have discussed, I go ahead and give it my approval.

 

[Nashoba]

Going to move this to approved. Tweaks won't affect the general nature of this.