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Approved Character [LSDF Val'ta] Er'red Nny'ust

Hi Jimmy,

Laconic as always, and to the point. Here's my feedback.
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  • Build and Skin Colour: Er'reds -> Er'red's
  • Facial features: The nose musn't be that remarkable if it isn't mentioned.
  • It makes perfect sense that he'd retreat to the Val'ta to get away from a meddlesome sibling.
Everything else seems reasonable to me. If you'd like, you can add another sentence to each of the skills but that's your call.

Also note, Er'red might be of use in the Val'ta's Science team with their biology and science/virology skills once we do some proper exploration. It's good to have that sort of flexibility.
 
It also means we don't have to rely on Ny'za who's focus is animals, just in case anyone gets sick XD.
 
Oh yep, between the 3 of them we should be able to handle anything...'cept maybe star trek sicknesses that Kirk put in the system, but didn't mark them as urgent, even though they can literally cause a ship's crew to jettison themselves.
 
Your expansions to skill and to abilities and the addition of a nose are satisfactory.

I'm calling him Approved. Now go do medical things!
 
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