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Approved Character [LSDF Val'ta] Menelik Berhane

Its entirely possible the superiors wouldn't know. I just edited it so it isn't. Also, I just updated what the pheremone actually does so its a per-player response and its up to players how they respond rather than getting yanked along into unwanted harem play. Its more designed for funny misunderstandings and stuttering awkwardness than it is heads over tails creepy stuff which I've updated accordingly.

 
With special thanks to @OsakanOne for clearing up how the pheromones work, I'll get to evaluating this. Here's my feedback:
  • Physical characteristics seem fine to me. Maybe someone in his family tree was an ID-SOL or ID-SOL hybrid, owing to his statuesque size. He could easily match size with a few of the fyunnen and a couple of the lmanel on ship.
  • His history seems alright to me. Religion isn't a very touched on thing in the Nepleslias, but most ethnicities and subgroups of Nepleslians have their own ideas, rituals, habits and such in day to day life. They can be quite a diverse lot in that respect. Menelik may be able to talk theology with the more rigorously theocratic Lorath.
  • HE LIKES PAPAYAS!
  • He doesn't like Aetherpserm!?
  • I'd recommend splitting the history into a couple more paragraphs for the sake of readability, but it reads well. My recommendation, new line at "It was thus that when he came of age..."
  • Funky City is always capitalised.
  • If you would like, you can note that Menelik also recognises Lorath command structure too, as a part of his cross training.
  • Inventory is good. Good ol' Nepleslian standard issue.
That's my feedback. If you could address the points I've raised I'd say this is good for approval. For now, this character is pending.
 
I've taken a look, and this looks good to me now. Please post after I post tonight/later - your character was probably amongst the briefing, and can be somewhere aboard the Val'ta, be they getting used to their new found bunk, or watching the ship go into FTL from the observation area at Deck 3, or at the gym.

Welcome aboard! Character Approved!
 
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