Approved Character Luca Pavone

[Luca]

Name: Luca Pavone (Also known as Sebastian, Pav or Wolf)


General Information

Species: Yamatai
Gender: Male
Age: 20

Family / Creators: Mother - Alive and Well. Father - Alive and Well. Elder Brother - Unknown, missing.

Employer: Star Army of Yamatai
Occupation: Cargo Worker
Rank: Santo Hei
Current Assignment: YSS Goban


Physical Characteristics

Height: 178 Centimetres
Weight: 66 Kilograms
Measurements: (Not applicable)

Build and Skin Colour: Has a lightly toned build, not muscular though. Olive skin.
Facial Features and Eye Colour: Brown eyes, bushy eyebrows, thin lips and a large nose.
Hair Colour and Style: Close-cropped black hair that's been spiked up at the front and back with long sideburns.

Distinguishing Features: Has lots of stubble from shaving, Nose slightly misshapen from accident (Falling down stairs).


Psychological Characteristics

Personality:
Rebellious, selfless, not too bright, always means good, Unyielding honour to those above. He has a hard time understanding how his mind works because he's an individualist first and foremost. He's been aching to join the Star Army for the prospect of a good pay, adventure and to meet new people. He doesn't observe manners or customs from time to time, but he is kind and benevolent.

Likes: Eating, Adventure and Speed.
Dislikes: When things break down, Waking up early.
Hobbies: Drawing, Writing about random things.
Goals: To find his brother and meet new people along the way.


History

Born and raised on Yamatai, Luca is looking to make a quick buck from an adventurous lifestyle in the army. He's had a fairly stable life with his natural parents who always look out for him or help him as long as it's for his own good. However, when Luca's older brother went missing a couple of years back on a space trip, he's been rattled.


Skills

Unarmed Combat: Luca has been known to take up lessons Karate, so he is proficient in unarmed combat with Unarmed Combat in Karate Style.

Sprinting: For those urgent deliveries, Luca has been able to run that extra mile to make the deadline or delivery.

Motor Cyclist: Luca can drive and make light repairs to Motor Cycles or similar means of transport.


OOC Notes

Most recent Profile Edits (Made on 21st of the 10th.):
Items, Possessions and finances added, OOC notes changed.

Items/Possessions

--Standard Issue Gear--
2 Star Army Male uniforms
* 2 jackets, blue, with Red panel colors (Enlisted)
with "Hinomaru" patch on right arm, 3rd XF patch on left arm
* 2 cotton undershirts, light blue
* 2 pair pants, light blue
* 1 belt, black (for pants)
* 1 pair leather gloves, dark gray
* 1 pair leather boots, dark gray
* 1 pistol belt, leather, dark gray, with holster for Type 28C NSP
Weather Uniform
* 1 black tricorner hat, thick felt with white border
* 1 black overcoat, calf length
Uniform accessories
1 Rank Pin, Nitô Hei

Civilian and workout clothing
* 1 yukata (cotton robe), white with Star Army of Yamatai Hinomaru logo print
* 1 black sash for yukata
* 2 black bikini swimtrunk bottom with Star Army of Yamatai logo on left leg
* 2 black T-shirts with pocket on left breast
* 1 pair black sandals
Undergarments
* 4 black cotton boxer-briefs
* 4 pair of black boot socks

Weaponry and Tools:
* 1 Ketsurui Zaibatsu Type 28C Nekovalkyrja Service Pistol w/ 2 additional BR-28A Battery Magazines, worn on the Right inside holster.
* 1 Survival knife, solid diamond with rubberized grip and lanyard w/ black leather sheaths with loop and clips for belt, worn on the back of the belt and concealed under the shirt.
* 1 Type 28 10mm Pistol with 1 extra magazine and 160 (20 mags worth) of 10x25mm rounds. Half are hollow point, half are full metal jacket, Worn on the Left side of the belt inside a holster.

Wooden Medal Case, velvet interior, engraved with Star Army logo on top

Tomoyo's Kikyo Medal (Injured by Custodian)

Personal Hygiene
* 1 Bottle of shampoo
* 1 Bottle liquid body soap
* 1 Toothbrush and tube of toothpaste
* 2 washcloths, white
* 2 towels, white
* Hair-cutting items (scissors, razors, cream, etc)

Electronics
* Electronic Money Card (balance 3,000 KS)

Other Items
* Fine chain with an Opal/Seashell Ring around it. (Worn on neck)
* 1 Suitcase with Civilian Clothing contained.

--Luca's Civilian Clothing--
* 1 Orange button-up Vest with a Gold Laurel Wreath imprinted on the back.
* 1 White longsleeve Undershirt with Laurel Wreath crest on Right Arm.
* 1 Leather Belt with Silvered Buckle.
* 1 Pair of Green Denim pants with heaps of pockets.
* 1 Pair of Blackened Leather Fingerless Gloves with the Golden Laurel Wreath imprinted on the back of the hands.
* 1 Pair of Polished Leather Biker's Boots.
* 1 Pair of White Anklesocks

Finances/Money (Rank E1)
3000 KS - (Starting Money)

 

[Fian]

Hi, wellcome to the Star Army!

First things off, you should read the Character Creation Guide before creating a character, if you have not already did. On the last page of that guide is a character template which, if you can fill up every line in there, you are mostly clear.

Secondly, Geshrins are (recently)obsolete, you should try another race. Either Yamataian, Neko, or Nepleslian works fine for beginners.

You should read some of the approved biographies to get a general idea how biography writing is done.

In any case, your biography is looking good. Work on it some more.

Do post your contact information so we can contact you.

Feel free to ask any questions or seek help! Most of us can be contacted by personal message or Yahoo Messenger.

Welcome again! I hope you will have an enjoyable RP experience here!

 

[Doshii Jun]

In essence, head here to get a feeling of exactly what you're missing. History is most important, as is the format, but you're close to being there.

 

[Doshii Jun]

Any updates on this?

 

[OsakanOne]

When you submit a character for the first time, it's a really good idea to sift through approved submissions first and see what correlating trends you spot.

These trends tend to be our unspoken guidelines.

Don't abandon the character and if you want to make changes, just use the edit button in the lower left of the post.

When you make changes, explain what changes you've made on the bottom for those new to the thread, mmkay?

 

[Luca]

Any updates on this?

I'd say it's finished now.

Awaiting approval now...

 

[Doshii Jun]

You've still got quite a few misspellings in there.

... I wouldn't want to limit what your character is capable of, or the style you want to play him as. But Asperger's Syndrome, by this point in time, should not be possible. We can transfer entire "souls" from one body to another; his should not be carrying such an obvious defect -- especially since he was born well into the Empire's golden years and must have transfered to a Yamataian body at some point.

Wes, I'd prefer you give us the call on this. Can Yamataians have mental syndromes like this?

Is your character actually going to join the SAoY? He's a little young ...

Thugs on Yamatai are a pretty rare sight. Are you sure he shouldn't be Nepleslian, where there's more thugs than normal people? If that's the case, he probably wouldn't have a mother.

What does he deliver?

Those are some questions you can consider. Keep going; you've almost got it.

 

[Wes]

Syndromes and such don't really make sense, like you noted. Also, the messed up teeth are really, really, really a rarity on Yamatai, where healthcare is free and generally painless.

 

[Luca]

I've edited it as par request, and I appreciate that you've taken your time to do this. Modding a forum must be stressful work.

All the noted edits are on the bottom.
Hobbies were included too!

 

[Wes]

Approved.