Approved Character Matthew Smith

Adjusts his tie.

Well, here's the latest for Phoenix.

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=characters:yamatai:matthew_smith

Just one question: What color of the wheat bread is his hair? The crust or the bread itself?

Yes, I clarified this, and also added on a little information in his personal build. Looking back, it seems a little thin, but right now, I can't think of much to add.

Placeholder. I'll swing by and check in just a few.

Looks good overall, just a couple of things.

First, is that I'm pretty sure the yamataian transfer was free, so long as you were a Yamataian resident. That's easy to switch up, just say he used the money on setting his family up in a part of town where it was a decent bit nicer then their old neighborhood or something.

In his likes, you talk about him "maybe" disliking nekos. It's really a yes or no thing, since he lived there, and undoubtedly met some.

I find it a bit strange that someone who'd been dealing with stuff along those lines for so long would have as few possessions as he does, but that's not a real problem.

Other then that, looks good. Sorry it took me so long, I got distracted, and totally forgot. :?

Ok, I think I've hammered things out.

I changed the Yamataian transfer, and had his siblings moved to a nicer neighborhood. It sounded like a good idea, and I liked it. I've also altered his dislike into more of a mistrust and fear, moving it to the personal section. A yes or no is too black an white for what I had in mind.

I've also added a few more items to his inventory, including a swtichblade, black business suit with stripes, and a black fedora with stripes. Hmmm. Need to add black leather gloves....

I've also increased the occurrence of the word 'normal' as well. Hope it's good.

Well, looks good to me. You got my approval.

Should I move this into the Approved forums?

Please.