Corp page: Link important aspects in the first paragraph. YE created, link NDC when you mention it, and so on.
Later on, link Nyx Pine, mineral scanner, anything that can be linked- link it.
Metallic, uncle, gems, government, mines, and so on don't need to be capitalized in the middle of a sentence. Please hunt these down and don't capitalize random words unless they are proper nouns or start of sentences.
Uncle's needs to be "uncle's" not "uncles" if it is denoting ownership.
The sentence: "Their encounter with Nyx Pine filled an important need namely the backing of the royal family, or at least one of them." Should be: "Their encounter with Nyx Pine filled an important need, namely the backing of the royal family, or at least one of them." Even then the last comma could be a hyphen but that is not as necessary of a change as having that comma between need and namely.
This needs to be rephrased for comprehension: "The locations in the New Dusk conclave has the name as part of it there..."
"...from Refugees as they had been to expats alike..." You can be an expat, not go to it. Please change the wording of this sentence. Also who are they expatriates of?
The phrasing of this sentence is confusing. If you cut it into smaller sentences with punctuation then I think it would make more sense: " They also made an agreement, that if they found a deposit that measured up to a typical home, they could individually keep it, but anything bigger than that was for The New Dusk Conclave to use as they wished, and they had to make sure that they were finding deposits for the New Dusk Conclave."
Get rid of the logo section if you're not going to use it. Red links, no matter the reason, should not be in submitted articles.
“From dusk we'll dig, for inside every world, is the sun of a new dawn.” Should be: "“From dusk we'll dig, for inside every world is the sun of a new dawn.”
I hope the additional pages section gets more links in it, namely the ones up for review. Currently it only links one of the sub-articles that got moved out of this review. Do not have sub-articles that are not up for review in this thread linked in an article that is up for review. Add them once they are approved.
Can you link Obsidian City?
When you do link something instead of saying: "...the ones in-charge are listed in the link below
Mining Operations." say "the ones in-charge are listed among
Mining Operations." The link isn't usually (it is when you've used bullet points, tho) below like it is in most cases outside of the wiki but should be a part of the prose.
This: "Some of the information about the gemstones sold was found here
Gemstones, unfortunately no sites found could detail the cost to sell refined Metal or the ore" Should be an OOC Note/a footnote. It would be best as a footnote. To make it that, enclose it in double parentheses. "((Some of the information about the gemstones sold was found here
Gemstones, unfortunately no sites found could detail the cost to sell refined Metal or the ore.))"
On your Selling subsection, there needs to be text or prose after the header and before the table. That is true for every article and subsection within it. Items needs to be capitalized. Please do not use real USD. Convert them to KS, use your best judgement. There is a
thread where Wes adds insight to some items and could be helpful to this from a few years ago.
You say: "
Currently, the Partners are below The Mining Guild has come to the
Department Of Engineering (D.O.E.) for their..." To make the part of this that starts with "The Mining Guild..." below the former part, select the sentence and then click the bullet points part of the toolbar on the wiki editor. It looks like three dots with lines next to them. Same with the part about Black Wing Enterprises.
There needs to text or prose after the header "Buying" between that and the table. Item again needs to be capitalized.
Include in OOC how to ICly contact the mining guild to buy or sell.
Sorry this is a lot, but I think there are some parts of making and submitting a wiki article that you have yet to learn. Here is the
style guide for help there. I am happy to help you get on the right track for the future, though! Because it amounted to a bit, I am going to hold off on the sub-articles until the edits are made to the main one. Thanks for working with me so much on this. It's a really cool addition and I thank you for your contribution to SARP :] Also I will throw a checklist down but it makes more sense for me to do so if a lot of wording and changes will occur.
stararmy.com
] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and article template
