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Mishhuvurthyar Tentacles

CadetNewb

CadetNewb

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Submission Type: Article Update, Anatomy/Phisiology
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:mishhuvurthyar:tentacles

Faction:
FM Approved Yet: No
Faction requires art: Not Sure

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles: No
Contains New art: No
Previously Submitted: Not Sure

Notes:

Originally, I had started on a WIP of the STP or 'Standard Tentacle Package', but never finished it. But before I knew it, that unfinished version was taken and put in place of the original page anyways. What I have here is the continuation of that same update, and though it's not done yet, I was hoping for feedback as always.
 
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Well, I'm not sure what I ought to be looking for, but I can at least say that it looks well presented to me, and I didn't notice any glaring grammatical errors. I can see the resemblance to the old STP article in it. The 'Other' section at the bottom seems partially redundant, but I assume it's place there is temporary.
 
I'm not fond of these articles. It tries to nail down details on stuff I'd rather perceive as more unfathomable. Which is a silly preferrence of mine, but it doesn't help that several items in there don't quite behave like in my 'headcanon'. Normally, this would prompt a response from Cadetnewb saying: "totally willing to cooperate, let me know the details you want in" but then I'd air my points, I'd get contradicted/debated by other people and I frankly don't want to get into that.

So, get this cleared with Wes, not me. whatever happens here, I'll probably GMify it to my liking in my plot. *shrug*
 
It's not a bad article, I guess. But I agree with Fred in that it seems unnecessary. And it has a pretty porn-y vibe.

Also, the article itself seems incomplete. There are three empty headers.
 
Darn. I really tried removing as much of the porny-vibe as possible. Though, yes, it is incomplete - I wanted feedback on what's currently there so far.
 
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