Approved Character Needs Approval: Des Caldwell

[Rada]

I'm taking the plunge! Let me know what I can work on.

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... e_caldwell

 

[Sigma]

*cracks knuckles* Okay, these are suggestions which will make the PC ready for 4th Fleet. Since I have not heard from MoonMan that he's passing you to me, anything the Moonie says is final.

1) The skills all talk about "he" or "your character." Personalize them so it doesn't seem like an obvious copy-pasta job. Also, you can choose an additional three besides the required ones.

2) Choose your swimsuit and sidearms. Remember that the Showstopper is only available to 4th Fleet Marines. So if you're going to Alto, then you get the IAW instead.

 

[Rada]

Thank you, Sigma. I didn't even think about the pronouns after the c&p. Derp. Will change that and the weapons.

 

[MoonMan]

I gave Amyith the basic breakdown of the potential plots, and I'll facilitate Des if Amyith still wants in on the Altomir.

The character herself looks pretty solid, and I have no major issues. The character approval mods have my A-OK for evaluation.

 

[Wes]

She does have basic cybernetics installed.

Can the nature of these be clarified?

 

[Rada]

Fixed. Sorry for the lack of clarification. I'm wary of overpowering my character, so I erred on the side of caution. I was, perhaps, a bit too cautious.

 

[Wes]

Character approved

 

[Rada]

Thanks!