Approved Submission Neju Koyu Martial Art

[Ametheliana]

Submission Type: New martial art for Yamatai
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=wip:neju_koyu

Faction: Yamatai @Wes
FM Approved Yet? No
Faction requires art? No

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? No

Notes: This is based on the Okinawan style Goju Ryu with added SARPy flair. The first two letters of each word of Neju Koju have significance when put together. Neju Koyu was also an unapproved subarticle of an approved article, which can be found here.

Ty @CadetNewb !

 

[Wes]

FM approved.

Style issue: Needs text immediately following the title header. You could just move the About section there.

 

[Ametheliana]

Text is now under the header as well as in the about section. Thank you, Wes!

 

[Doshii Jun]

I'll take this.

 

[Ametheliana]

Now it's just up to @CadetNewb

 

[CadetNewb]

Doshii said he'll go ahead and review it. XD

 

[Ametheliana]

Oh, man, I misconstrued that!

This goes for the other one, too!

 

[Ametheliana]

Just want to both apologize for the confusion earlier, that was all on my part, and ask @Doshii Jun how it's coming.

 

[Doshii Jun]

I'll review it today. It's my weekend, so I'm enjoying the family.

 

[Doshii Jun]

Haven't forgotten.

 

[Doshii Jun]

The style feels basic, with core elements, solid explanations and just enough to for players to use and advance. I like the inclusion of weapons at the end.

The tale behind it is a great use of past events and RP! Well done indeed.

Approved.