Approved Submission [Nepleslia] MacKinnon Monster Mk-I & MacKinnon Ballistinc Solutions

[Gunsight1]

Here we go, finally have this to where I think it's set to go.

This is a pistol I've been working on for Nepleslia for....years.....and the ammunition and very small company that produces it!

Submission Type: Weapon and company
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:mackinnon:monster
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:mackinnon:mackinnon_ballistic_solutions
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:mackinnon:455_mackinnon
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:mackinnon:mackinnon_energy_cartridge_mk-1

Faction:
FM Approved Yet? (Yes/No; Who, When) yes, today, @Gunhand
Faction requires art? (Yes/No) I think so?

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) yes, cited above
Contains New art? (Yes/No) yes
Previously Submitted? (Yes/No; explain reason if rejected) no

Notes: ping @Ametheliana or @CadetNewb

 

[CadetNewb]

I can go ahead and look at this, sure.

 

[Gunhand4171]

FM Approved. Looks awesome

 

[CadetNewb]

Looking it over I suggest actually dividing the Appearance and Operation into separate sections. Specifically, stuff regarding the operation of the weapon can go into the weapon mechanisms area. You can actually have a paragraph under Weapon Mechanisms, and take stuff out of the bullet points to be put into the paragraph if you'd like. A little bit more detail can be given to describe the iron sights, but that's completely optional. I think the weapon is good to go other than what I previously mentioned.

The company looks good to me as well, though for the ammo? I suggest stating if it's brass cased, and if the case is rimmed or rimless(recessed rim). You may also have varieties of projectiles ranging from FMJ to JHP to Cast Lead and Sabot even, but that's all up to you. If you don't make varieties at this time, you just need to state what the default bullet is. No problems with the cell though since it's a space battery.

 

[Gunsight1]

kk, I will have this stuff sorted shortly

 

[CadetNewb]

Sure, let me know.

 

[Gunsight1]

Updates made to the gun and ammunition

 

[CadetNewb]

Awesome. This article is APPROVED

 

[Gunsight1]

AWESOME