Ira said:This is a Battle Ship.
Heavy armor and powerful guns are kind of implied. Key Features would be like some new fancy technology peace, or luxurious interiors, a new kind of shield or engines.
Ira said:Also, the weapons list The Primus has a simple job: be the most powerfully armed and heavily armored warship wherever it is.
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Completely violates the DR system we have in place. Rule of thumb is you can't have more SDR then what the ship has on its hull going in one direction at anytime.
Soresu said:But the big thing that leaps out at me is the Propulsion Statistics. Usually they're on the page, not linked to another article. Also, range wise this vessel won't be getting very far at a paltry Forty-Five Lightyears. Is it meant to stay close to home?
Wes said:The "rule of thumb" is that regardless of how many guns you put on a ship, anything more than twice the ship's SP is not counted. So, for example, if the ship has 25 SP, the maximum DR is 50 against one target in one turn.
Wes said:I agree with Ira that this feels uninspired and the lack of art is a big part of that. In the submission form in the OP, it says the faction requires art. So where is it? Thanks Ira for being brave and saying something.
Wes said:The section between Ship Systems and Armored Hull and Hull Integrated Systems is empty. Most of the other sections could use some more beef to them. We want this to be something people can easily use in the RP.
BionicSamurai said:I wonder. Is this a single ship or a whole class?
. If you are find my work uninspiring, please read Yamatai's own Sharie and Yamato articles. They just list everything as bullet points. Take away the artwork and you'll see that I wrote more. I acknowledge this can be improved upon (which is why I submitted it here for review), but Yamatai's comparable warships are no great shakes either. As part of the titular faction, shouldn't they be of the godly inspiring level you seek?Contains New art? Not yet, artist is busy
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The Sharie-class is a large battleship used by the Star Army of Yamatai. It is built by Ketsurui Fleet Yards and replaces the Yuumi-class Battleship and Chiharu-class Flagship.
Produced in YE 32 the prosecutor is the largest dedicated warship used by the Gartagen Union Solar Navy.
The Primus-class battleship, also known as the Primus-class Dreadanught, is one of [[nepleslia:democratic_imperium_of_nepleslia|Neplesia]]'s largest capital class vessels that serves the role of an anti-starship platform. It was designed by [[nepleslia:nepleslian_arms_and_munitions]] and introduced into the [[nepleslia:navy|NSN]] in [[:ye 35]].
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