Spelling errors (Lots) and punctuation....
quadrupedal not quadropledic
So chosing which ... So choosing which
than thier first .... than their first
who is incharge of ... who is in charge of
to seperate the ... to separate the
race possess two sub-races .... race possesses two sub-races
so they aren't entirely ... so they are not entirely
Shukaren-Laibe
Weight - weight is between one hundred and one twenty five. Females are in the eighty to ninety range. < what unit of measure, Kilograms, Pounds, Stones....
Shukaren-Duar
NO mention of weight at all.
does 'not' includ the tail .... does 'not' include the tail
color as the body, the tip is bushy .... color as the body; the tip is bushy
This includs the toe. ... This includes the toe.
amount of similaries, ... amount of similarities,
hand, don't feel any real ... hand, do not feel any real
quirks than an adult, however, this ... quirks than an adult; however, this
fox-like ears, the color ... fox-like ears; the color
Volunteer Mliitary ... Volunteer Military
, it doesn't matter .... , it does not matter
Skills section, do you have "Boiler plate skills written somewhere?"
What about starting equipment.
History? Likes, Dislikes, any common personality traits....