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[Neshaten] Fur'ken Cargo Freighter

Kyle

Insane Story Writer Foxy
Inactive Member
Submission Type: Freighter
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ne ... _freighter

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes, me, when I started on it!

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yes
Previously Submitted? No!

Notes:

Civilian ship submission for when I put up the military ship later, there is currently no artwork for this ship just yet, but it's on my to-do list.

Unapproved article is the following:

Neshaten Cargo Hold
 
This review is for: Fur’ken Freighter

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

Status: Pending

Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.

Lacking details
  • Ship has no communications system listed
  • Sublight speeds should contain KM/sec for refer
  • FTL speeds should contain reference of LY/m or hour as appropriate
  • Interior has no indication of bathrooms
  • No mention of FTL drive

I intend to finish this review by: COMPLETE
 
Ok, I 'think' I did everything correct this time, and also updated the details to includ that which you pointed out.
 
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