This review is for: Ge'kina Class Passenger Liner
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[
-] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[-] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
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-] Lacking Detail
[ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.
Spelling and grammar errors
plante --> planet
trecherous --> treacherous
ships crew --> ship's crew
cefeteria --> cafetaria
ships hull --> ship's hull
the passengers liner
equiped --> equipped
aproximitly --> approximately
indivisuals --> individuals
arrises --> arises
ship utilize's --> ship utilizes
ships captain --> ship's captain
its vs it's
as it's power -- as its power
to it's expansive
Cargohold should be cargo hold
There is only a single generator. What happens if the ship is damaged, you have no backup power listed.
Crena Energy Engine
- As listed you are trying to make this engine require no fuel. But you want it to produce plasma. But the only thing you are supplying is electricity. And you are claiming that is very efficient. But you can not make plasma with just electrons, you need some sort of physical matter than you can heat and ionize.
Mark 1 'Roktruvance' Anti-Fighter Turrets
Streamer Laser Turrets
Both are identified as Anti-Fighter, but the damage is SDR, anti-fighter weapons are typically ADR
Also your Mark 1 has two modes of fire but no difference in damage is listed.
Status: Pending
Notes
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