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[Neshaten] Ki'nene Restaurant

Kyle

Kyle

Insane Story Writer Foxy
Inactive Member
Submission Type: Location
Submission URL: Ki'nene Restaurant

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes, me!
Faction requires art? Nope

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? One
Contains New art? Nope
Previously Submitted? Nope

Notes:

Heu'trane

Am working on some artwork for this, an interior shot, but that won't be done for awhile (its not a priority of mine)
 
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Overall only two issues that I see. First, what is the family name of the owners, glass for the floor that goes to space. That means the floor is going to be a weak point for the station, and is going to heat up and cool down depending on if its hit by the sun.
 
Made those fixes, also added a sub-article to the original post; this one details what the transparent armour is.

Also, for some reason my spell-checker is acting up. The one I have for the document I use for writing up these articles wants armour as the spelling, but the spell-checker for my browser wants armor. So, I just stuck with armour :P
 
Fixed a few typos, a grammar error. And just because I know you are in the US, put the US version on things like armor and center. :lol:


APPROVED.
 
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