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[Neshaten] La’zerus Class Carrier

Kyle

Insane Story Writer Foxy
Inactive Member
Submission Type: Carrier
Submission URL: La’zerus Class Carrier

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yep!

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Several
Previously Submitted? Nope

Notes:

Carrier ship for the Neshaten, contains four unapproved sub-article:

Combat Squadrons
Modular Gravitic Network
Universal Turret Mounts
Multi-purpose Torpedo
 
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Review in process, completion by 12/11
 
This review is for: La’zerus Class Carrier

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)\\
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.

** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

Please put SLT Speed in format as shown here. Sublight Speed Conversion

Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings

Status: Pending

Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.

I intend to finish this review by: (WRITE IN DATE)
 
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