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[Neshaten] My'leke Modules and Attachments

Kyle

Insane Story Writer Foxy
Inactive Member
Submission Type: PA Main Module and attachment modules, weapons.
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ne ... sal_module

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yep! Listed below
Previously Submitted? Nope

Notes:

The MUM is a piece of equipment that the My'leke can wear on their backs, this equipment has modules, such as weapons and medical, that they can control easily given their lack of being a bipedal species. The MUM is the base component, to using the modules.

There are four attachments that go with this, three of those attachments are combat related, while the other one is not.

I was told that because of the size of these modules, and how they require external power to operate, that they qualify as power armor. The base module itself is going to become the backbone of the My'leke future full power armor, but for now they have just this.

Additional Attachments:

Taurus Anti-Tank Cannon
Makuran Anti-Infantry Turret
Medical Module
Battle Rider Module

Kurosha Anti Infantry Turret
 
Please make it clear in the first sentence exactly what it is.
 
If you mean on the main MUM page, edited the first sentence. If you meant in the notes, did the same.
 
Review in Process - Should have results and checklist done 4/15
 
This review is for: My'leke Universal Module

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[-] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[x] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

Status: Approved.

Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.

Complete including the sub pages.
 
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