Approved Submission [Neshaten] Nomenshan Star System and Nebula.

[Kyle]

Submission Type: Planetary System, along with Nebula
Submission URL: No'menshan Star System

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes, me
Faction requires art? Nay

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? A few
Contains New art? Nay
Previously Submitted? Nope

Notes:

This is a rather mysterious star system due to what is explained in it. I plan on having this be one of those explored by my plot. There is also the Nebula, which I have omitted the area size since I felt putting a restriction that would make it hard for others to put systems in it in the future.

No'menshan Planet
Va'haken Nebula

 

[Sigma]

It sounds like "No Mention." Just pointing that out.

 

[Kyle]

No mention?

 

[Nashoba]

he is referring to the name of the planet.

 

[Kyle]

Geez I can be dense sometimes (no comments =P)

 

[Sigma]

No mention it.

 

[Wes]

I fixed an "it's" error and three errors where "area's" was used instead of "areas."

Please edit the page so that it uses complete sentences.

The Va'haken nebula page ends abruptly.

 

[Kyle]

All of the sentences are complete, at least from where I am sitting

As for the Nebula page ending abruptly, the last header states what systems are located within the Nebula; other than that I don't know what more to add to it. So, any suggestions on that front would be welcome.

 

[Nashoba]

Review in process.

 

[Nashoba]

Approved. Both the System and the Nebula are sufficient since the GM is planning on having them explored by the plot to add more details.