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[Neshaten] Ya’tronesha Hub Station

Kyle

Insane Story Writer Foxy
Inactive Member
Submission Type: Modular Station
Submission URL: Ya’tronesha Hub Station

Faction: Kingdom of Neshaten
FM Approved Yet? Yes, by me.

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Several
Previously Submitted? No.

Notes:

The type of station the Neshaten use.

The following are unapproved and attached to the article:

Ne-P1-1A Crew Module
Ne-P1-3A Industrial/Construction Module
Ne-P1-4A Mining Module
Ne-P1-5A Combat Module
Ne-P1-6A Power Systems Module

Also:

Universal Turret Mounts
Modular Gravitic Network
Lunabaren High Energy Reactor
 
Please use complete sentences in the opening paragraphs.
 
Corrected several of the "it's" problems and also fixed a few of the headers to be more simplified. Hopefully, this fixes the problems :)
 
Could you make some art for these?
 
As I said in IRC; all artwork for these are being made by Khasidel :)

I know he was supposed to start on the modules a few weeks ago but I don't know where he is with those.
 
Been a month since this was last looked at, two of the sub-articles were removed due to incorrect information (I need to bug Khas about that) artwork is also being worked on by him but it is taking some time.

Currently, this is suffering from submission rot. Is there ANYTHING that is holding it up?
 
This review is for: Ya’tronesha Hub Station

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines

Modules do not have the DR for them listed. You have teh DR for the hub but this is needed especially since some of the modules are larger than the station.

[-] Lacking Detail

Modules need their dimensions listed. You should be able to give an approximation using the image with the modules attached.

As for Art for the modules you could probably use the image that has some of the modules attached and identify what each one is in the image.

Status: Pending

Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.

I intend to finish this review by: Complete
 
Approved. There is enough artwork to warrant approval, and we know that Khas is working on addition art for the other modules.

APPROVED
 
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