Yoshi
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Approved Character New Char: Tani Mako
- Thread starter Yoshi
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Aendri
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There are some issues with the profile that need to be fixed.
Age probably needs to be >1, not <1. The way you have it could mean she's three thousand years old, or two.
There are a number of spelling/grammar issues just in the physical descriptions alone. "tannish skin wrap her", "feathered purple hair the shifts", so on.
I'd also like to see much more detail in the personality than two short sentences. There's much more room for detail than you have there, regardless of how you want the character to develop. What's written there isn't locked in stone, it can change over time just fine.
Age probably needs to be >1, not <1. The way you have it could mean she's three thousand years old, or two.
There are a number of spelling/grammar issues just in the physical descriptions alone. "tannish skin wrap her", "feathered purple hair the shifts", so on.
I'd also like to see much more detail in the personality than two short sentences. There's much more room for detail than you have there, regardless of how you want the character to develop. What's written there isn't locked in stone, it can change over time just fine.
