mizunoyoroko
Inactive Member
Okay, fixed the requested edits, didn't even think about the effect time would have had. Sorry about not putting it in wiki form wes. Nicholai Vandherson.
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Approved Character Nicholai Vandherson
- Thread starter mizunoyoroko
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mizunoyoroko
Inactive Member
Have at it
MissingNo
Inactive Member
You have his daughter marked as deceased...I don't know if that's a typo or if you missed it in the history.
Other formatting notes are the bolded entries for "Likes" / "Dislikes" / "Goals" which means you're missing a [/b] somewhere. Also, in a display of pure nitpicky-ness, you're missing a space between the colon and the entry for "Likes". And lastly, as an aesthetic note, the second paragraph of the history could use an "enter"-key press somewhere (suggested at "...slowly died. [new paragraph] When he returned to work..."). Right now it's a rather large brick of text.
Heh. Likes kids and guns, huh? Together or separately? X D
The firearms part of Fighting and Physical are the closest I saw to what could be considered "OP", but they're reasonable IMO according to his training and purpose. Since he's been out for a year, though, maybe you could note whether or not he's continued practicing the weapons and combat while away from the military, and whether the year away has degraded those skills any? Getting back into those might be like getting back on a bike, however, so...who knows.
He's kept his physical up with construction, so that's not a concern.
So...I'll wait for a character approval mod to check this over, but that's all I can see.
Did you have a post in mind when you built him or was he going to ask Gem to hire him and let her decide what for?
Other formatting notes are the bolded entries for "Likes" / "Dislikes" / "Goals" which means you're missing a [/b] somewhere. Also, in a display of pure nitpicky-ness, you're missing a space between the colon and the entry for "Likes". And lastly, as an aesthetic note, the second paragraph of the history could use an "enter"-key press somewhere (suggested at "...slowly died. [new paragraph] When he returned to work..."). Right now it's a rather large brick of text.
Heh. Likes kids and guns, huh? Together or separately? X D
The firearms part of Fighting and Physical are the closest I saw to what could be considered "OP", but they're reasonable IMO according to his training and purpose. Since he's been out for a year, though, maybe you could note whether or not he's continued practicing the weapons and combat while away from the military, and whether the year away has degraded those skills any? Getting back into those might be like getting back on a bike, however, so...who knows.
He's kept his physical up with construction, so that's not a concern.
So...I'll wait for a character approval mod to check this over, but that's all I can see.
Did you have a post in mind when you built him or was he going to ask Gem to hire him and let her decide what for?
Looks good to me. Missing is the man.
This character is approved for IC usage.
This is mizunoyoroko's THIRD active character. He is a veteran player, allowing for a third slot.
This character is approved for IC usage.
This is mizunoyoroko's THIRD active character. He is a veteran player, allowing for a third slot.
mizunoyoroko
Inactive Member
Awesome! However, this is actually my third active character. My first two are Yoroko and Natsuko (in the 5xf).
MissingNo: I kinda would like to have him talk to Gem. No post in mind.
MissingNo: I kinda would like to have him talk to Gem. No post in mind.
