Non-Haiku Thread

I

I'm Only Dancing

Inactive Member

• May 18, 2005

• #2

Thats 16 syllables, Tel
Need 17 for a haiku

 

R

Rob

Inactive Member

• May 18, 2005

• #3

I know not how to
write a small haiku; and yet
still - I try now...

 

Zakalwe

Inactive Member

• May 18, 2005

• #4

Is that 4 on the last line?

 

R

Rob

Inactive Member

• May 18, 2005

• #5

no it cannot be
for I used "-" as a part
of the whole! I win!

 

I

I'm Only Dancing

Inactive Member

• May 18, 2005

• #6

if - is a sound
then here is a great haiku
bow before me, fools

 

Zakalwe

Inactive Member

• May 19, 2005

• #7

'-' does last as long in mental reading time as a word, so the poem doesn't flow well for Rob. Sekiko managed it well though.

 

R

Rob

Inactive Member

• May 19, 2005

• #8

strange, I must agree
but still I think it went well
for just a first try

by the way my friend
why move posts for no reason?
it is a grave folly...

 

Zakalwe

Inactive Member

• May 19, 2005

• #9

Ahah:

For your first one:

6
7
5

Second:

5
7
6

And I didn't move it.

 

T

Telgias

Inactive Member

• Jun 4, 2005

• #10

odd, i wonder why mine was moved..... I didn't start this thread

 

Zakalwe

Inactive Member

• Jun 4, 2005

• #11

You got the sylables wrong I believe.

 

T

Telgias

Inactive Member

• Jun 4, 2005

• #12

o i see