Approved Character Norvan Wallace (Magic Muffin?...Anyone?)

[Wallace]

Norvan Wallace

Just joined, been RPing for a while, but this is my first Sci-Fi RP and I'm looking forward to it.

A little bit about me, I'm evil (I'm nice guy as soon as you get passed the flames of doom!), crazy and I have an infinite amount of Magic Muffins.

So....Magic Muffin anyone? Their magic!

 

[Doshii Jun]

As a general question: Is English a second language for you? I ask because some of your verb conjugations were off, and because a couple of your spellings sounded like UK English instead of American English.

Please don't take the question as a slight -- your writing is still more than good enough for the site, and plenty of Americans have come and gone who couldn't put a sentence together.

I ask because GMs like to know a player's capability with grammar, so they can grant slack in the editing department to a player who needs it. Some GMs are more lax than others, so you might or might not see ninja edits to your posts.

All GMs, however, are accepting of players.

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This character is in progress.

 

[Miyako]

All right! Let's have a look. Welcome, by the way!

Changes I made to the wiki:
-Added Picture
-Removed bra size
-Fixed language in some parts.
-Fixed inventory, please pick one weapon and delete the others.
-Nepleslians earn DA, not KS, fixed.

He looks all right so far, but I'd like to see some more writing on his Pre-RP history if in fact he's a P3C, and since you say he's been in battle before. A good first try!

This character is pending for minor edits.

 

[Wallace]

Can I just say thanks for all the help so far, I really appreciate it.

My first language is English. (Don’t worry about it, others had said the same thing, though to be honest I thought I was over that. ) I promise to look more closely for spelling errors

Thanks for the help with my picture and inventory. This is the first time I've ever written in Wiki code. I'm fine BB wise but Wiki code confused me for the most part. I'll go look through his history and modify it. I thought I put N/A for Bra size?

How was my skill description? I only ask because I really had problems with writing that.

Oh, and also would any one like a Magic Muffin?

EDIT: I have rewritten his History. I now await the all might power of the reviewers! *Cowers behind desk*

 

[Miyako]

You're very welcome, I know the wiki system can be very imposing when you're starting out.

I noticed you use UK English, which is perfectly fine I think that's what Doshii saw also.

The skills were fine, taking the example text and twisting it a little is acceptable, and commonplace.

A few notes on things:
'Pirates' does not need to be capitalized.
Make sure it says ID-SOL, not ID-SOl

Skills again:

I think diplomacy should have some more explanation. If he learned those sorts of things in basic, you should describe it a bit more, since as an ID-SOL it is a bit out of the ordinary but not wholly unheard of.

These changes don't bar you from approval, however. Also click the red 'Wallace' link, and create yourself a user page! This is generally a small bit of info about you, what you do in the rp, and your online time, etc. Also what characters you play.

Good luck!

This character is approved. Please make the little tiny edits noted above.

 

[Wallace]

Thanks very much, I'll get right on to it.

I was going to say The Order, but I think that would be a bit too much.

I'll get started on a user page as well. Thanks for all the help.