Approved Submission [NRM] Demon II Light Infantry/Ground Mechanized Armor

[demibear]

Submission RP Example

https://stararmy.com/roleplay-forum/threads/fall-of-osman-operation-durandium-cockatrice.71061/page-2#post-443781

Submission URL

https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=corp:nrm:suits:demon2_ligma

Submission Faction(s)

1. Yamatai (except Elysia)

Submission Terms

1. I agree

My attempt at revamping the old Demon and moving away from being another Mindy clone without the us of additional equipment.

 

[Andrew]

I will take this one, Reviewer Assigned.

 

[Andrew]

Hello! Let's see if this submission meets the requirements for inclusion in Star Army's lore...

Note: Just a few small corrections and considerations to make here. I have pointed them out below, but you need any assistance let me know.

[ ] 1. The destination URL should be a page in the appropriate namespace and titled lower_case_with_underscores
[ ] 2. The article is in the appropriate format and the article template. Is all the information for struct present?
[ ] 3. The article follows our wiki-style guidelines, including No forced line breaks, text after each section header, etc.

• Your tables under Sensors and Communications have awkward blank spaces. It might be better to use a bullet form list here.
• Also there is a handy link to https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=technology:common_communications_technology

[ ] 4. The article is easily read and free of errors in spelling and grammar

• A couple of spelling/grammar fixes that I can see:
  • Yours - "Though despite them (even the inferior M1), the Reds were not capable
  • Correction: "Despite these power armors (even the inferior M1), the Reds..."
  • Yours - "While there were interest in restarting production for a yet another ill-fated fight..."
  • Correction - "While there was interest in restarting production for yet another ill-fated fight..."
  • Yours - "Where most modern power armor are designed to be mini-walking arsenals..."
  • Correction - "Where most modern power armor is designed to be mini-walking arsenals..."

[ ] 5. Links to other wiki articles are present as appropriate and are not broken
[ ] 6. The article fits into the Star Army universe's space opera theme and technology levels.
[ ] 7. Images in the article are hosted on Star Army's wiki and credited in the OOC section.
[ ] 8. The article is original and doesn't contain copy-pasted content from other articles.
[ ] 9. The article complies with Star Army's rules in terms of damage ratings, speed limits, etc.
[ ] 10. The Faction Manager(s), if applicable, have posted approval for this article in this thread.

Other Reviewer Duties:

• Nomenclature
• Price
• Damage Rating - With this one, I'd think the version with the laminate of Durandium Alloy would be Tier 3, And the Osmiridium would be Tier 4.

 

[demibear]

Removed the durandium plating option since the mobility skin is already T3 and . Adjusted the articles history to account for this (why RyuK would do it) and ran it through chatGPT to proofread it all. Also adjusted the advantages subsection.

 

[Andrew]

Great. 3 -day approval timer. Expires 2024/12/05 @0730PST

 

[Andrew]

Timer is pretty much expired, Since I will be busy later. Approved.

 

[Andrew]

Please remember to fill out struct.

Thank you

 

[Andrew]

Forgot that we are supposed to fill out struct for you, so it is done

 

[demibear]

I can do all that, it's not a burden on me.