This review is for: Neshaten Medical Kit
The submitted article is/has…
[X] A very high level of overall quality
[X] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (illustrations are required for Starships, Vehicles, Hand weapons or Small Arms, Uniforms for military forces or large corporations and new alien species not from the race of the day CCG)
[X] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[N/A] In the proper format/template
[ ] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[X] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[X] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[X] No red and/or broken links
[X] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[X] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ] Obtusely redundant
[ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[ ] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[ ] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[ ] Lacking Detail
[ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[N/A] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[N/A] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines, if applicable
[ ] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
A few typos are present - correct them. More detail for the nano-injector and scanner is needed. YE system of dating not used. Standard Product Nomenclature System not used. No artwork.
Status: Pending
Notes
In the 'Curone' sub-article, change delude to dilute. Also, overdoes to overdose. For the Yuka'shane article, change snake to snack - also, blood rate to heart beat rate.
All these articles themselves are fine I believe, save for the Diagnostic Nanite Injector with Medical Scanner - it is lacking detail. There's little information about the nanites the device uses, as well as the scanner itself. Specifically, I want to see what the nanites are capable of and what they do, as well as what the scanner can do.
Of note, the article does not include the YE system of dating alongside the ER system. I'd like the YE dating system included alongside the ER dating system to dispel any confusion and make things easier for the players.
Additionally, it does not use the Standard Product Nomenclature System, but that is optional. There's also the fact that the kit itself has no art while its constituent parts does, but again, I believe that is optional.
I intend to finish this review by: 2/5/2012