This review is for: Endurium
The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[-] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[-] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view
The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)
The article has…
[na] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[na] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[-] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.
Summary
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Spelled wrong, flexibile
Grammar composite threads, Including carbon including should not be capitalized
Missing year of creation
Under uses you say it can be used for doors. But under limitations you say that Endurium is not effective in less than 1 inch thickness. So what kind of doors are you talking about?
Status: Pending
Notes
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Remove the ceramic references, you've already said it is a composite armor made with layers, it removes the fragile concept of ceramics.
I have a concern that a lightweight material is going to provide an armor equivalent to the most advanced materials. As currently written under the damage rules you are trying to get the top armor with the low end speed adjustment.
Heavy Yamataium, Zesuaium, Nerimium 1.0 SP
Light Armor Durandium, Carbon Ring, Aerudirn +.05c STL .425c
Also under the armor rules a ship can only have one armor rating, but you say Endurium has to be applied to another material.
Under repair you say. "When Endurium is damaged, it can be repaired by patching the sections of plate, which involves cutting anchor points into the armor and filling it with layers of ceramics and composites. A patch is just as strong as the original piece would have been, but acts as a separate plate instead of a piece of the original. " So how do you get the patch to attach, and bond?
