[Origin for YSE] Type 32 Grav Train

This review is for: Type 32 grav train

The submitted article is/has…
[ ] A general topic sentence under the title header
[ ] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[ ] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[ ] Obtusely redundant
[ ] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[ ] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[ ] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[ ] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[ ] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[x] Lacking Detail
[ ] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[ ] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[ ] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

Status: ]Pending
- No general topic sentence
- No artwork/minimal description for the train cars
- Point Defense Phased Array Laser is listed as unapproved
- No DR capacity listed
- Nothing listed under price
- Standard Nomenclature system not used.


Notes
The cars lack detail; no pictures and 2 sentence descriptions (fixing one or the other would be fine). Are these cars powered by their own aether generators or do they draw power form the main car? How do all the cars connect? How would a second engine car be added (no apparent connection mechanism in the front)? Can the trains work on planets with no atmosphere? Is there any protection against backwash from the engine/what is used for propulsion (as the exhaust is pointed right at the cars that are being pulled)?

I intend to finish this review by: April 18

Fixed the topic sentence.

I was actually going to finish models for the cars after I completed a starship project I've been working on.

The PDPL is approved, Five seems to have been too lazy to remove the unapproved tag. I will rectify this.

I forgot about the Nomenclature

I need to figure out the DR and price I suppose.

Glad to see the multiple views and confirm, yes, it does look awesome. Good job on this one, Kai.

Added statistical information, clarified some systems, and made and uploaded images of the different cars.

Oh, and I double checked that the PDPL was approved (it was) and removed the unapproved tag.

The passenger car really doesn't look double decked. Is that intentional?

Well, 6m is rather tall. The bottom deck's windows are about stomach height, and the top deck's windows are floor to ceiling. I simply used one panel for both decks because it was easier.

Well there is the door looking bit which seems to stretch from top to bottom like a single story door would.

That finishes the problems with this submission.

-approved