This review is for: OI-M3-W3202 Rocket Anchor
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[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
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[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
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[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
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The following details are missing.
- No Guidance system is listed, so there is no targeting or control for the IAPD, nothing to tell it when to turn off etc, basically means especially in space that if you miss the anchors will drag you off course as they continue to blaze away. Which is worse if you fire multiple and they miss because then they will be playing tug-o-war with your frame or mech.
- Need the SP for the cable listed. Since this is supposed to be used to pull things to it, the object being attacked should have the means to attempt to cut the cable. So it needs to be listed.
- There is no mention of how to jettison the arrowhead. Which currently means that if the anchor hits something immovable, there is not way to disconnect from the object.
- There is no explanation of what protects the winch from being ripped out or damaged when an anchor misses. The speeds you have the arrowhead flying at would deal catastrophic damage to the winch if it ever runs the full length.
- Need the number of times the arrowhead can be used. Slamming into objects at the speeds you have listed, the arrowhead is going to take some damage each time, so it needs a service life. ex: 10, 15 times before the arrowhead must be replaced.
- Pricing information would be nice, especially for replacement anchors and cables.
FY: Serration makes something cut more, it does not make it harder to remove. That's what your barbed ends are for.
I intend to finish this review by: COMPLETE