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[Origin] Scimitar Starfighter

This review is for: Scimitar Star fighter

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (illustrations are strongly encouraged for all spacecraft and handheld items)
[-] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[-] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[x] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[-] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[x] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[x] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[x] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[x] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.


Summary
Note here if any serious issues are present. These are the issues that will hold up approval.
** Short description of the issue. If a longer explanation is needed, put it in Notes.

Overall just a few minor issues. However, I would like Wes to chime in about the SAoY variant.

Typos
manueverabilty maneuverability
customizeable customizable

Status: Pending

Notes
This field is for any extra description needed for the issues stated above or (as the name suggests) and additional notes you wish to state in the record regarding the item.

Where do the wings fold? Can you provide an image that has an arrow showing where the fold is?

I intend to finish this review by: Complete
 
Fixed the spelling errors, and added in both a picture and a text description for the wings folding.

The values on the SAoY version were actually given me by Wes, but I would like him to look over it again, as you say. We need his approval for it.
 
Yeah, I had no real issues with the values, just want him to approve another fighter for use by the SAoY is all.
 
Okay Kai,
I spoke with Wes last night briefly on IRC regarding this.
He said as along as a Taisho wants some Scimitar's then he's fine with it.

Origin can expect an order from Mikasa Sorano in the near future.

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