[Origin] Starbryte Shuttle

[Kai]

Submission Type:Shuttle
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:starbryte

Faction: Origin/Civilian
FM Approved Yet? Yes, Me.

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? No
Previously Submitted? No

Notes: Replacement for Origin's old shuttle.

 

[raz]

Pretty sick lookin.' Great job on the renders, Kai. What's its maximum capacity? It's blank right now.

 

[Kai]

Thanks.

Seems I must've missed that when I was going through, it's been added now.

 

[Wes]

Other than the unknown maximum capacity, the article seems mostly fine; the remaining work it needs is on grammar issues.

Please replace the second-person language ("anything you can think to do").

space- anything

Please change this to some valid way to join or end the sentences. I see at least two instances where a hyphen was improperly used like this.

which is built into the main structural hoop that surrounds the Cockpit.

Please do not capitalize normal nouns.

Also, what happens if someone pushes the toilet in only halfway, or too hard, or if the gravity were to fail?

 

[Kai]

Fixed the hyphenations and as many capitalization errors as I could, and the maximum capacity had been updated before your post.

As for the toilet, there are mechanisms which make certain that it all works correctly, which I would rather not explain- an article describing exactly how all that works would probably be longer than the article for the shuttle, and I don't want to do that over a toilet.

As for the gravity- It cannot fail, the gravitational plating works with or without power. If the gravity were to fail, it would be because the floor and ceiling have separated from the walls, and the toilet would be the least of your worries.

 

[Wes]

Approved

 

[Kai]

Awesome! Thanks.