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Approved Submission Primal Fury Hunter unit

Syaoran

Syaoran

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Submission Type: Mecha accessory/drone project
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:primal_fury

Faction: Origin
FM Approved Yet? No
Faction requires art? I don't think so

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? Yes
Contains New art? No
Previously Submitted? No

Unapproved artciles:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:primal_fury:hunter
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:primal_fury:chaser
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:gekido_kai (Added for organizational purposes)

Notes:
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:primal_fury:chaser is not actually finished and not being approved at this time. I'm looking to see if I did this right in the first place before I have 2 drones to fix.

@CadetNewb or @Kai probably might want to look too.
 
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I'm very sorry for not getting to it sooner - I still have a few posts to go through, but I'll most likely look at it up close later tonight, or tomorrow morning.
 
Having looked over this a bit myself, I have two things to say; First, this is a good solid idea, and it has great bones to it, and can definitely be a good addition to the Gekido platform.

Secondly, I have to say that the articles themselves are in a very rough state. It's given both the names Primal Fury and Gekido Extend, of whicj I suggest you choose one and stick with it. It is also sorely lacking details, of which Cadette will help you go through, as he's more familiar with the Gekido itself than I am.

Officially, this does not have my FM approval yet, But, it does have my blessings as FM, and I wish you to finish developing and refining the ideas and articles a bit more before they can be properly submitted and reviewed.
 
Well the two names were from the fact that the Gekido had to be slightly altered itself to support back units. That Gekido is being called the Extend, because it doesn't have to be strictly for primal fury packs, just any interchangeable back unit made for it. But yeah I'm more than happy to receive some more insight that I can put into the articles.
 
I went over some of it with Kai, and I agree with what he said - the concept itself is great, but it just needs polish. Right now, it's a little confusing. If this is an "Extend System" then the article as a whole should be named that. My guess is that an M3 which has this system put onto it would probably be called an "Extended Fury" at that point, since it's got more options. A "Primal Fury" would then be a specific configuration; the one with the drones you mentioned. This is a suggestion of course - you can name it as you'd like. It just needs to be straightened out some, that's all.
 
That's kinda what I was going for. Though I see how it's confusing too. I put the 'Gekido Extend' on the primal fury article because it at best would've been a stub on its own since it was so few edits. It would probably be best as a 'variant' on the Gekido page, thinking about it now. But pretyt much "primal fury" is the transforming backpack drones system. And 'Gekido extend' is a Gekido with the main booster on it's back removed so that it can accpet modual backpacks.
 
I would definitely say that adding the extend as a variant on the main gekido page and just focusing on the primal fury modules for this article is a good idea.
 
Well, instead of having a Gekido Variant, we could have the "Extend" as a master page for all following modifications to the frame instead. That may be easier than doing an update of the M3 page.
 
Oh that's a good idea. That would make approval easier too if each modification just gets its own section there. And we can list them off like all the M16 variants in real life. And that way any big modifications can have their own page, but people have somewhere to put little modifications.

So now that the Gekido Extend and the Primal Fury are separated from each other, I gotta work on refining the pages, any suggestions?
 
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I added the page that can be a master sheet for any variants to the Gekido frame itself, and added the 'Extend' as the first variation. The page is meant only for actual modifications to the Gekido that can not be changed without a total overhaul. So accessories and modular systems wont actually go on this page, and will probably go on an accessory page made at a later date.

The page: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=origin:gekido_kai
 
If CadetNewb and Kai are ok with this, then I'll finish off my review in a few days.
 
Syoaran is currently Origin's #3 guy. Be confident that if he is posting Tech for Origin, it has already gone through either myself or CadetNewb and is therefore FM approved.
 
Oh geez I completely forgot about this submission, I am so sorry Syaoran :(

But yes, it is fine so it is approved for usage!
 
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