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Approved Submission [RA] Ranil'inas (Raiken Homeplanet)

Sham

Inactive Member
Submission Type: Planet (Homeplanet)
Submission URL: https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=planet:ranil_inas

Faction: Raiconian Alliance
FM Approved Yet? Yes, by me, at the time of this post.
Faction requires art? Sure

For Reviewers:
Contains Unapproved Sub-Articles? (Yes/No) Nope
Contains New art? A MS Paint infographic! And some really cool descriptions
Previously Submitted? Zip Zop Nope

Notes: I will create a map, suggestions on a program would be neat.
 
This suggestion has been implemented. Votes are no longer accepted.
This review is for: Ranil'inas

The submitted article is/has…
[x] A very high level of overall quality
[x] A general topic sentence under the title header
[x] Artwork (Required for new species; Strongly recommended for vehicles and hand weapons)
[x] Needed and/or useful to the setting
[x] In the proper format/template
[x] Proofread for spelling and grammar
[x] Easy to read and understand (not a lengthy mass of technobabble)
[x] Wikified (terms that could be a link should be a link)
[x] No red and/or broken links
[x] Reasonably scientifically plausible
[x] Reasonably neutral point of view

The submitted article is/does not…
[-] Overpowered (or cutting tech for a faction with little or no roleplay)
[x] Obtusely redundant
[x] Contain copy pasta descriptions of systems or interior compartments
[x] Unauthorized by faction managers or player-controlled corporation
[x] Contain references to IC events that have not occurred (SM must authorize retcons)
[x] Use second-person language (“you” or “your”) unless it is an instructional guide aimed at players.
[x] Use bombastic language (“virtually immune,” “nearly indestructible,” “insanely powerful,” “horrible effects”)
[x] Use an unbalanced header/text ratio (many headers but sections are one-liners)
[x] Use major unapproved sub-articles that should be submitted separately
[x] Lacking Detail
[x] Images hosted on sites other than stararmy.com (Photobucket, Imageshack, etc are not allowed)

The article has…
[-] Speeds in compliance with the Starship Speed Standard, if applicable
[-] Damage Capacity and Damage Ratings in compliance with the DR Guidelines
[-] The in-character year of creation/manufacture. (Should be current year. Future years not allowed).
[-] The Standard Product Nomenclature System, if applicable.

Status: This submission is approved for IC usage.

A quick question: what kind of predators do they ride?
 
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