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Approved Character Re: Ira Ramirez

Doshii Jun

Doshii Jun

Perpetual player
Retired Staff
https://wiki.stararmy.com/doku.php?id=ch ... ra_ramirez

1. In history: Who was racist against his family? Yamataians? Geshrin? Neko? Yamataians and Geshrin would hardly have a reason to be racist, but Neko probably would. That's not to say Yamataians and Geshrin couldn't be racist, but it's somewhat unlikely.

2. In skills, under Leadership:

Make it say this instead said:
Leadership (Public Speaking): Ira is a good orator, and is able to word his ideas and opinions well. He will attempt to use this skill to get women, but more often then not he will use it to explain his ideas to others.
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Overall: The character borders on being bland, but the "disliking fat women" made me chuckle, as "fat" isn't an objective term. Everything else looks fine.

This character is pending. The submitter must address the list of edits above and then bump the thread.
 
(Addition: I really need to learn the "delete post" button is at the bottom of posts, not the top. Sorry for deleting your post, Tony.)
 
I am editing it now, I will be a little more specific.

As far as the being bland thing, I am leaving room for character growth. What is the purpose of Role Playing a character you know everything about? In real life people hardly know much about them selves. So All I can do is tell what happened. Point, he had a somewhat normal child hood. Not everybody's beginnings are so..melodramatic. That and you can only describe a cup of water so many different ways.

I am also not new to Role Playing, and writing, so I have my own methods.


Its cool with the post deletion.
 
Also — a player let me know that your character should possibly be a Trainee, not a Cadet. I'm not sure of this, so I'll let it slide for now, but know you might have to change it.
 
Okay lets see, I put the leader ship like you advised, and fixed the racism thing.

Ive also played on this forum in the past. I am really just getting used to the new format of it.
 
I give the okay for him to take up the Cadet rank, we'll probably throw him into OJT in plot, since... we need a few new officers. Also talked to Ira over YIM about some timeline/technical hiccups.
 
Approved, but please fix the formatting.
 
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